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Passion the possesion (Part 2)

You shiver
transformed there is no doubt
from the inside and out
my voice like red hot embers
burning softly through your veins
dying sunlight reflected in your eyes
on this our most precious night

You shudder
female form bending wildly out of shape

my cold blade resting upon your navel

your body pressing for that which you desire
your fear pulsating through your mind
as your hunger it does grow

You quiver

my fingers pressing down on that blade
marked for ever from this day
my passion you will embrace
for tonight I make you my slave

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  • Dark and seductive, with a hint of that ol'Scorpio dash of pain.


  • Night Terrors
    April 27

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    Bravo I think this is my favorite out of the three I haven't read the thrid one yet but this is wonderful. I am going to add you to the finalist list.

    The Positives:

    Great sensual poem. I found this very well written and extremely sexy

    The Negatives:

    Nothing that I can see
    My Favorite Part:
    my cold blade resting upon your navel

    your body pressing for that which you desire
    your fear pulsating through your mind
    as your hunger it does grow

    You quiver

    Interesting anology I loved that

    Overall:

    I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.

    ~*~Apathetic Poison~*~

  • *shakes head* Im nobodys slave....



    Well done, on to part 3..im liking this.

    Good luck

    Passions


  • darkyinsoul
    April 23

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    Wow....
    enslaved
    Well done
    Thanks for the share
    Darky


  • Rose Angel gold member
    April 23

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    Penned passionately, yet very dark...imagery and flow excellent..

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