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Delectation

Oh! What impatient ecstasy
Waiting to rush forth in glorious splendor,
To boast at the apex of his desire.

Yet, from whence will his satisfaction be made,
Crying with building expectancy --
Bubbling birds searching for rest
Amidst the cracking bones of spruce and pine.

The man raises his body with bated breath,
Desperately searching for that milky comfort
Which is found in the legs, breasts, lips
Of the Beloved.

The fountain --
His resolution breaks forth in rapturous passion,
Creating a billowy, ever changing sculpture
Of crystal and glass.

The water blindly searches
For it's wellspring, its source.
With hands stretched forth
Towards the heavens,
Towards its euphoric crescendo,
It fails, descends,
Returns to its MotherLove
In supplication, surrender.

He rests --
Puddled in a blanket of
Warm, plump skin. Nestled.
The diminuendo take its place
As the orange exaltation
Drifts off into melodious slumber.

Author notes

This is my first poem written with the concept of symbolism in mind: focusing more on the impression which the words convey than actually explaining each separate, distinct concept. This is also an important element of abstract poetry. I originally wrote the poem to explore the nature of a longing that is waiting to be fulfilled. After reading to the poem "Clair de Lune" (the inspiration to Debussy) I was torn by the image of an unfulfilled desire. I began to write, to express the impression -- only, as I continued to write, I noticed that my poem formed a resolution, a satisfaction to the desire. This could probably be considered the idealist perspective.

The man and the fountain can be interpreted as two separate and literal entities: the man in search of the beloved to enter him and the water at the apex of a fountain yearning to fall back down to its source. Yet, the fountain was explored as a picture of a yearning, climax, and a resolution. I've also incorporated some musical terms in order to compose a song to go along with the impression I have created.


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  • liquidmindforever
    May 30

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    Puddled in a blanket of
    Warm, plump skin. Nestled.
    The diminuendo take its place
    As the orange exaltation

    Nice.

    Thank you for entering my contest: PREWRITES FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY WINNERS

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    until then
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    liquid

  • Judith Chandler
    May 28
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    Nice write.


  • bonjourbunnie
    May 5

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    I like it, but I feel it better conveys the male perspective than a womans. Still, the imagery is fantastic, and the metaphors woven throughout are very good.

    Thank you for entering, and good luck.


  • grammabuff
    May 3

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    The title intrigues me enough to read the poem. The poem is so full of imagry and metaphor that I have read and puzzled many times. Very well done.


  • NickBlaze
    April 26

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    One of the few people to humor me with Author Notes, I applaud you for that alone, if not for the poem itself.

    I had come to the original expression of unfulfilled desire and slowly evolved to desire; a great, what would be considered well-planned beginning and ending. Though, I fear, in the beginning I almost thought it would end up erotica, I was very pleased with how it turned out. A wonderful poem.

    I would more times refer desire itself to a different musical term: cadenza. I find that most desire seems improvised rather than set on paper by any means of the term.

    Anyway, it was laden with amazing imagery, great metaphors, and a great topic overall. I fear it missed certain other aspects of literary devices, but no poem calls for them all. None call for many (though few call for none).


  • Emmabug
    April 23

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    It was very good, a bit hard to follow but I could get the imagery from behind it. Keep it up though!


    • Emmabug
      April 23
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      Oh...you didn't have to remove it! I liked it! I'm just not choosing finalists yet!

  • SternBlinkin
    April 23
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    ::small smile:: simiply creatively beautiful.

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