She had couture in her punctuation,
but without him there to rearrange her words
every imagination fell short into a cliché;.
“Darling lets dance away catastrophic details.”
the water won't let him drown tonight.
No regrets as her lips touch his,
sparks and fireworks shine bright in her eyes,
but he doesn't come around anymore.
“Three bullets in a jail cell,
one's trigger happy so duck down.”
A contest entry
- Help me reach my 2000 comment By entering your poetry by Night Terrors.
400 points, ended May 11, 251 entries
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first time writing in a while...
Comments
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wow, the imagry in this blew me away, it was great! A wonderful choice of words, thanks so much for entering this and good luck in the contest!
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This is so very good, I lovelovelove it doll
" No regrets as her lips touch his,
sparks and fireworks shine bright in her eyes,
but he doesn't come around anymore. "
Favourite bit [:
Well done;
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..confused by this one..
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hmm unusual not really to sure what you were talking about. I loved this though it was very well written.
The Positives:
great job this is an excellent poem
The Negatives:
nothing I see
My Favorite Part:
No regrets as her lips touch his,
sparks and fireworks shine bright in her eyes,
but he doesn't come around anymore.
very creative metaphors
Overall:
I give this an 8/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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