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To dig for love

 

 

 

 

 

I took the moon

and peeled off its layers

                  (carefully)

until I got to the core.

 

 

I found silence

          as an independent language,

        weightless words

          living without backup

        and high hopes

          hiding behind black butterflies.

 

 

And yes,

         I was that arrogant -

    as I expected to find

    a heart-growing tree;

      an answer,

         to this genuine interest

         I unintentionally grew...

      a solution,

         to this honest cluster

         of irrelevant thoughts

         longing to be matched.

 

 

But my head must have been

that far up my ass,

I could kiss my own heart

               (and I better did) -

 

 

     The day feels broken again,

        cause I couldn't keep it to myself

  and I caress insomnia

 as the cracks of my night

      ruin the best paint

       life ever made...

 

 

     As usual.

 

 

 

 

 

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  • patron saint
    May 5

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    You are one of the few people with whom I hurt alongside when his words reflect pain. That is the kind of connection you have been able to always establish with your reader. I hope you aren't too blue, my dear boy. Please do send me a line.

    J


  • Daniela Violin silver member
    April 27

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    WOW!
    I'm sorry you're feeling so sad...
    But this is very beautiful in its sadness


  • Nicolette gold member
    April 24

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    "I found silence
    as an independent language"

    those words just caused a lump in my throat, leander... so very often silence isn't golden, it's just plain black. this one touched me, but... but i'm so happy to see you writing again. just write towards the noise, like i'm trying to do. Wonderful layered poetry, my friend.



    ~ Nicolette


  • Mari Goes gold member
    April 24
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  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 24

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    You are amazing - I'm sure you get told that a lot - but I thought that I would just mention it again I really love the imagery in this piece - especially the opening lines beautiful!



    Polly


  • Peteskid gold member
    April 23

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    Leander-
    yo do not cease to amaze with the way you can dig; as if beneath a layer, is another layer...you reach so deeply; then i sense a wondering: if this is the way at all...that is the best part to me...we all need this... to always test this assumption that we really know or understand our feelings. For me, the doubt is a key to ever resolving anything...I think this is a very evocative writing, so skillful, and expressive... PK


  • EternallyAlone
    April 23

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    that was soooo deep! Seriously, that it exactly the mindset my ex had.... wow. that explains sooo much! He tried to explain it to me earlier.. but I didn't get it til I read this!


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 23

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    Brilliant

    "weightless words
    living without backup
    and high hopes
    hiding behind black butterflies."

    So much emotion here ..Beautifully expressed,
    as always

    Lynda





  • bonjourbunnie
    April 23

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    Some quick criticism before I praise you.

    In the third stanza, it is "interest," as you have forgotten an e.
    I also think some of the syntax could be improved on, such as "and I better did," in the forth stanza. It doesn't flow like the rest of the language in the piece and could be revised.

    As for the rest, I really enjoy the fresh metaphors and imagery. It ignites the mind and keeps it interested in what you have to say.
    Your mood is conveyed fabulously; I can almost feel the disappointment and self criticism washing over me as I read it, so I can only imagine how you felt when writing it.

    I also love the composition; it's unique and makes reading the poem feel a bit more tangible.

    Over all, its a good piece! Thanks for sharing


  • Visions to Ponder
    April 23

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    I love how you made the words look. This poem was really nice, I like how you described the emotions and feelings in this poem. FANTASTIC write.


  • Poetic Tasha Moderators member
    April 23

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    wow hunny we have talked alot lately so I really am feeling the weight of everything in this one --- wish i was closer to hang out & have a laugh...
    your words are woven quite impressively here, wonderfully laid out and flows perfectly....

    dikke knuffel hun
    slaap zacht tonight...

    Tasha
    xx


  • Kari gold member
    April 23

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    Aw bro I am so sorry for all of your hurt and pain lately. At some point insomnia will eventually leave and you'll feel better again.


  • LadyUnique silver member
    April 23

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    wow. there's much in here for me to digest. i'm gonna give the clappies and bookmark this to come back and read a few more times.
    in line 6 did u mean 'independent'? i hope so cause 'silence as an independent language' is excellent
    i really, really like this Lee and not just because i like you


  • Parearoo
    April 23

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    Awesome

    Excellent use of imagery, and the words you choose to convey how you were feeling were perfect! I enjoyed this poem VERY much, and I'm glad to see you're still writing!
    Much love!

  • poetrynovice
    April 23
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    Very Nice

    Well written and thoughtful. Excellant use of imagery and descriptive language.


  • JustSimplyLissa gold member
    April 23

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    Beautifully written, so rich in thought, and vibrant in feeling. Wonderfully written my dear friend.

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