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Poem of the Heartless Age

When that fateful night
Crashed around us, flashing through the air

        I knew what had happened.

I said yes, you said no
The world stopped for seconds

        That dragged on for hours.

Eyes met eyes
Then danced away again

        So dexterous when they need to be.

You smile, I frown
Then smile again, knowing

        The world is better for it.

Author notes

Random poem really, about a relationship/friendship that fell apart for the better.

Blah. Whaddaya think?

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  • LucyLightning
    May 5, 2009
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    I really like this, actually.

    I like the sporadic-ness of it.
    It honestly reminds me of how we were in the beginning.

    Buttttt.
    I like this little stanza:

    "I said yes, you said no
    The world stopped for seconds."

    Favvv.

    Mhm mhm mhmmm xD

    Okay!
    Keep writing!
    Have fun!
    Keep it snazzy!
    Don't have sex!
    & ... drive. At least... without me.