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It's Just A Dream (Or Is It?)

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The light always shines from between two dark clouds
The darkness dissipates from the very light it shrouds
I journey along within this magical dream
And soon realize nothing is as it seems

The light always shines down upon me
Piercing the darkness so that I may see
Surpassing all of my troubles from within
After it ends, the journey begins again

I have learned that life is but a path entwined
We travel around, searching for our peace of mind
Not realizing that all along we've had it inside
Not realzing that it is ourselves in whom to confide

The light may shine from between two dark clouds
But the darkness disappears in the very light it shrouds
Alot of things feel like nothing but a dream
But now I realize that maybe it is what it seems....

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  • Dmonik
    May 20

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    "If we cannot trust ourselves, who can we trust?"
    We find 'Faith' in others, but have little faith in ourselves. This is well written, and thought provoking writing, Ray.
    Again, your words have left me a little in awe.
    Bravo

    'D' (Scott)


  • DinkyDiver gold member
    May 16
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    Awesome picture! And lovely rhyme!
    Welldone on the gold shiny x


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    May 6

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    I absolutely love this- I can't say anything more!
    When we realize what lies within us, we can accept those things around us. This is truly a powerful write.

    Thank you for entering and good luck
    Storm


    • Timeless Wisdom silver member
      May 6
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      Thank you for your kind comments and the gold trophy. Blessed Be my teacher, my soul friend, fellow poet, and wiccan sister.


  • Denerica
    April 23

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    Excellent, I bookmarked this, I need peace of mind right now, yes I know the Lord, but life still gives you those hard blows. Well done! Blessings.


  • Katilina
    April 23

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    I really enjoy the last stanz. I love how you took cliche images and turned them on themselves. Great wisdom and knowledge that I take from this poem...

  • Macsword
    April 23

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    From the keyboard of babes...

    a spark of wisdom...


    "I have learned that life is but a path entwined
    We travel around, searching for our peace of mind
    Not realizing that all along we've had it inside
    Not realzing that it is ourselves in whom to confide"

    A strong lesson for a young man.

    but "realizing" is spelled once right and once wrong

    This is not a complex rhyme...and that's okay, but there are (I believe) too many repeated words and this one line:

    "Alot of things feel like nothing but a dream"

    I believe needs to be rewitten without "Alot"

    I just don't think it fits any part of the rest of your write. But I see your thoughts here are pure, poet.



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