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Love doesnt live on sonnets alone

  I
Shared in our love
We come together
Population two
Down to one
Fresh and new
Dancing to sounds
Of our own loves clatter
II
Words only tell a story
Our lips
Feeling nothing of this world
Only expressing life
Pain,sorrow,laughter,and joy
III
She sees my naked spirit
Standing alongside lovingly
Presented
Stripped of all but her boisterous spirit
Together we toil
Reaping love in abundance



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  • a59teeth
    April 24

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    ahhh, somehow this mirrors my own reality!

    i most liked the first stanza. it seemed to have an air of whimsy to it! i can clearly see your questions regarding editting. this says alot though as is!