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Under a Starry Sky

Hard pieces of stale bread
Shine like stars in someone’s eyes

Someone, somewhere savors
The melting taste of fallen

Stars under a starry sky


Morsels fill the empty
Plate of soul with symphony

Of gratefulness

Some stomach dances like
A full moon every night

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  • lindaburns gold member
    October 29

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    This seems to say those who have little, appreciate more what little they have.  I’m sure some of them do. Really interesting.


  • Nicolette gold member
    June 16

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    What a lovely and meaningful metaphor you've applied here, Sophie. So glad I've dediced to return the many favours you've blessed my poetry with. A wonderful thought-provoking piece that allows hungry eyes to shine. ~ Nicolette


    • SabaSophiya
      June 16
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      Thank you, Nicolette. I am so glad you stopped by and appreciated. Take care, Sophie

  • Topnotchsy
    May 19

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    Great imagery here, and a poem I had to read through a couple of times to really understand. Nice write.


  • AJ Morelli gold member
    May 6

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    the first thing i did upon reading this is find out what country you were from and I should have guessed India by the tone and style... I originally tripped over some of he imagery but after a couple of reads it all became clear... hunger can make even stale bread as beautiful as stars, real or metaphorical


    great entry here, thanks


    al

    • SabaSophiya
      May 6
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      I am glad you found this worth a couple of reads. True poetry is always like that. Magnetic. It comes straight from the heart. It has nothing to do with country.

      Thanks for your sincere appraisal of my work

      Take care,
      Sophie


  • dwellondreams
    May 3
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    This was beautiful. I loved it so much. Thank you for writing.


  • Ethereal One gold member
    April 29

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    beautiful

    Your words create some beautiful images for the reader. I especially like the 2nd stanza.
    Keep up the wonderful writing.

    Jeannette


  • Puppydog gold member
    April 25

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    DEEP IN THOUGHT!!!!

    I read so much meaning in your words here. What one may not even notice another may deemed beautiful!


  • Sandygram
    April 23

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    Lovely Poetry

    This was quite lovely. You do free verse so well. Stunning imagery to capture the reader. Thank you for sharing. Take care, Sandy


    • SabaSophiya
      April 23
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      Thanks a lot, Sandy, for your beautiful comment on my work. I am glad you liked it Take care!


  • poet2angels gold member
    April 23

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    Sophie, this is amazing!
    I love the metaphor all through this and it has such a spiritual feel to it..
    Beautiful!

    Lynda


    • SabaSophiya
      April 23
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      Thanks you so much, Lynda. I am glad you enjoyed this!! Take care!

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