Can you see through these smiling eyes:
see through fake passion: through my lies?
can you look deep into my eyes,
and see my ties?
my pain?
my cries?
No, you cannot see…
for my lie is right,
it is to keep you smiling bright.
As for me…
I have seen smite
And for now
I’m awaiting my fading light.
I stand here waiting as darkness falls,
I look around to see who calls;
I wait and wait but what befalls
Im left alone my eyes and all
Darkness has fallen;
I’ve become blind
So now...
I no longer need these eyes of mine.
Author notes
just a revision of it made by DreamerOfTheAbyss hope you like it, compliment him on this one
im just wondering what people think about my poetry.
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True beauty of well written poem.
A dark jewel fearless and bold.
Poetess...would you place this poem in the Gluttons For Punishment
group read list....so everyone can enjoy your strength and might!
ears2hearyou
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is a lovely poem, and I feel that I can really relate to the message. A great revision; well done, my friend!
I hope that you come to enjoy this site as much as I do, and in the meantime if you have any questions at all please don't hesitate to ask me!!
Best of luck with your future writing,
Maria
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Amazing
Wow, This is an Amazing poem. So deep, and full of emotion. Your an amazing writer.
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wow such passion of pain
i love it i have simlar feelings to it....its amazing i feel a connection.....you a wonderful writer good job
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I agree, this happens to be one of my favorites too. Please don't ever silence this gift you have.
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This one is my favourite of your poems. I love the end. Masking who we are to satisfy the public is a very tiresome chore, but one we do all too often.
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