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I Get Lost

 

I didn't mean to kill that man, honestly
I didn't, but the ecstasy that I got when

I chopped off his arms and fed them to

My dogs, made me lose myself to the

Passion of crime, so I continued to take

Parts off of him and make him suffer

His screaming was passion to my ears!

 

When he begged for mercy, I couldn't

Help but enjoy the cries of agony when

I sat him on fire, it was really nice to

Have someone share the pain with, can

You blame me for wanting to escape

The horror in my mind?

 

The ever calling of another person, telling

me what  I can and cannot do, drives me

Senseless and I get a little on the crazy side

I promise I'm not really that bad, it's just that

Sometimes I get lost in the translation of reality.

Author notes

Pic from
http://SindelChaos.deviantart.com/art/Sybil-42344036

Title from Titles R Us challenge group... title was originally given in 2008. just now getting to it.

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  • findingurself.less
    August 10

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    Creepy ... until the end, and then I get it and its GREAT!! Picture kinda freaks me out though! LOL It is perfect for this!


  • XRainbowliciousX
    June 25
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    I LOVE THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    It's like a story I can't stop reading..i wish'd it could be longer. The picture just goes amazingly!!!

    You are a very great writer.

    I love how you put all her thoughts.

    U deserve like a whole room of claps. lol.


  • FunkyDumpsterKittyG
    May 24

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    Dark, intense and well done

    Your imagination is pretty intense to bring out the dark imagery you displayed in this work. I liked it, even though it's not my typical type of poetry.

    My favorite lines are 15 and 16 ("[can] you blame me for wanting to escape/ the horror in my mind"). I think this write was a good match for the photo.


  • St. Anarchy
    May 13

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    Good narrative

    You really manage to capture the mood and keep it. There is a part where you say: I sat him on fire; sat should be set. Is that a hint of insanity I detect in the end? I enjoyed the poem - very reminiscent of some of my own


  • Raining Kisses silver member
    May 4
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    wow this is really clever your a great witer
    bravo


  • Firequeen
    April 27

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    Sometimes i get lost in the translation of reality
    WOW
    amazing
    I think this summed it all up for me
    I loved the way this was written the imagery
    wonderful
    Thank you for your entry
    fire


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 23
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    Brilliant, and where did you get the pic of my ex missus ?


  • cayleyxox
    April 23

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    awesome!!

    WOW this was amazing!! Your talent is outstanding my friend. I'm lost for words... Good luck in the contest, I'm sure u will do great.


  • Jalalbad gold member
    April 23

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    Reality is only a trick of the mind to get us away from the higher dimention so we will not filfull our greater destainy. Sometimes we write madness because we are trapped in time and space without knowing it. Everyday people perish for lack of knowledge... Great imagination you have.
    Thank you for reviewing my humble work.


  • reywildrmr
    April 23
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    am scared with your imagination... gud poem...

  • OurxBeginning
    April 22

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    oo, a dark write. Well demented and twisted I should say. The images were chilling. Nice job, and I hope you do well in the contest.


  • darkyinsoul
    April 22

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    Woo.. evil my poetess.
    Love the picture, loved the write.
    Demented in it's twisted ways.
    Rocked it.
    Teddy Bear

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