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Etheree Experiments: Pain (Class assignment #4)

Pain
is mine
owning it.
Unrelenting,
unbearable pain.
Even my shattered soul
feels it's confounding caress,
undressed,naked,familiar touch.
Much better I would be without it,
this suitor whispering intricate lies.

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  • cheaphotelsign
    April 22

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    oh yeah, i really dig this...the first three words, alone have gone through my head countless times...so gray and richly dark...a warm saddness, beautiful and hurt...the last two lines are f-ing phenominal...love love this