Come inside, enjoy the show
Bring your kids, come one come all
We want best, want you to know
You must redeem the fall
A message of peace and love we tell
You need to see the light
Or else your soul will go to hell
eternal fires burning bright
Please drop off your coat at the reception
Also drop your thinking cap
Once you buy immaculate conception
You have fallen in our trap
He is up there, closely watching
The origin, reason, centre
Keeping tabs and judging
Whether heaven you shall enter
Do not seek him with your brain
Seek him with your heart
To reason is in vain
We help you with the start
There cannot be infinite regression
There must be an ultimate cause
Alas, we're making one concession
For why is God? Because!
This book is perfect moral reading
Eternal, inerrant, infallible guide
We pick the good bits, we are leading
Our flock away from wickedness inside
Ten commandments you must adhere
To and never allow suspicion or doubt
Because making you behave through fear
Is what it's all about
Author notes
Inspired by the imagery of a person trying to sell religion like a car salesman, but failing by revealing a bit too much.
Offended? I am not sorry. Please leave a comment anyhow, but don't insult or proselytize.
A contest entry
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Comments
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Good job with this piece.
Nice flow and vivid imagery throughout.
Bravo
♥ Kate -
Part of being a Christian is reasoning with your decision to live that lifestyle. It never says don't question, don't think, throw out your intellectuality -- any of that. But I appreciate your viewpoint.
When you're yelled at, and told you're going to hell if you don't repent and believe in Jesus, if you change your mind and become a Christian, out of self protection-- that doesn't make you a Christian. It makes you saved, sure, but when you bring people to God through fear, you bring them to themselves. You don't create Christians with fear, you create satanists, because they're worshipping themselves.
I'm sorry if you've had an encounter with a Christian that has been less than ideal.
The rhyme was solid, the rhythm nearly flawless. You have an interesting tone, very clear and honest.
Have a great week
--Sarah
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This is a really good poem - I like the expressiveness of this poem, and the thoughts are unashamedly bold I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at adding some punctuation to help the flow a little and let the reader know when to pause and reflect on what you are saying - but that is just my opinion and I enjoyed this poem!
Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!
Polly
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
I'm not offended, I promise
This is a very good poem, and poetically your rhythm and rhyme is fantastic. You're not afraid to speak out about your opinions, and I commend that. Well done!!
I hope that you come to enjoy this site as much as I do, and in the meantime if you have any questions at all please don't hesitate to ask me!!
Best of luck with your future writing,
Maria
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