My tears are inside my eyes like a leaf on a tree ready to fall.
I stumbled like a blind man trying to see what’s not even there.
Nothing’s there.
I find it kind of funny
And I find it kind of sad.
Working at the planetarium was the only job I ever had.
Then came time to quit and fall.
Watch me fall.
I resigned.
No one understands me.
You don’t understand me.
I’ve got you in the corner.
You’re in the corner of my eye.
You’re whispering that I’m a fool, and it’s making me cry.
No one understands me.
You don’t understand me.
Author notes
This poem is true, and was inspired by the song: Mad World, by the artist: Gary Jules
Picture taken from: google.com
Thanks for reading.
A contest entry
- Your Favorite Songs! by reckless abandon.
1750 points, ended May 31, 19 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
How do you feel after reading this?
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Awh.. Well written. Keep writtong.
Chelsey
From a younger poet.
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Nice
I can relate to this
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First off: I love the song mad world. It's one of my favorites. Second, great poem. I really liked the lines, "I find it kind of funny, I find it kind of sad."
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Awww !
I love this it is a wonderful write .
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a good poem
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kuddos
I feel like I was standing behind you watching it all.... You managed to lure the reader into your world. And yes I can say that its frustating when noone understands you but they're judging you with a one-track mind.
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Very nice
A lot of raw emotion. Good smooth read. I really enjoyed reading this and I could see and feel the truth in the words. Thank you for sharing
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Job-market
Hope you have found something. Not easy times. Sad, but clever, piece.
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Excellent
I do not know if I have ever heard the song before.
At least I do not think I did.
*shrugs shoulders*
Excellent writing here.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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aw it was sooo good and sooo sad at the same time
Well written
keep up the good work.
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Very creative writing. I think the repetition gives this piece the depth it so needs. Wonderfully penned, love the beginning, brilliant!
Love and light,
lencio -
Very sad, yet very puzzling. Really leaves me wanting to know something specific about what happened. But perhaps that's the point. You come off sounding very honest and raw, even though you don't tell the reader much
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THe poem is so mysterious and so sad. Are you sorry you had to resign? Sometimes it is best to cut loose and move on.
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Wonderful
Very creative and so well expressed. A terrific write. Best of luck in the contest.
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All the way through I was thinking that I knew those two line from somewhere. How sad to work in a place where you don't feel comfortable. I think most of us have probably had to do that at some point in our working lives. I hope you soon get another job that suits you better.
Sheila
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that was a very original thought and poem.
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Aww, that's really sad.
"Then came time to quit and fall.
Watch me fall.
I resigned.
No one understands me.
You don’t understand me. "
Especially those lines, but I loved them.
The first stanza was a really good hook. [;
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The rhythm is wonderful in thispiece
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As I was reading I could hear this tune forming in the back of my mind yet I couldn't remember the name of the song until I read the author notes. Very effective use of rhythm and rhyme to make this work.. Well done!!
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good job, i though i recognized the lines
I find it kind of funny
And I find it kind of sad.
you set a good pace and used good language.
i shall look into more of your works!
cheers
Hunter~
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You rock!
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great poem!
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this was great!! good job!
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I smiled when I was reading this because I could tell it was inspired by Mad World (I love that song!) Great job and thanks for entering!
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I like the structure of this poem. It's got an interesting choppiness to it. And I wonder, what does one do at the planetarium? Run the projector, give the presentation? Just curious.
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It has great rhythm and was a good read.
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ooh nice write, great rhythm too really ran, worked well with that song inspiration
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I resigned from my job today, though it wasn't at a planetarium it was my first job so I can relate. Good write here.
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Grand
A fine piece...I wondered if it was in a specific form, for there were some interesting repeats going on at the end of the poem...Readers could read various senarios into this, and that's what a good poem can do. Well done, a fine read.....
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Thank you
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Very emotional
Hello Evemauy...the words seem to have come from a lost and confused heart...very well written indeed.
Rahbar.
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Thanks.
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There's a lot you don't say here but it sounds so sad. We are left wanting to know more.
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Thanks.
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Tiffany, this is really sad. I know you will find a job that you can enjoy and will make you happy. Don't worry too much. It will be ok if you don't dwell on it too much.
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Thank you.
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I feel confused. What made you sad, and did you get fired from the Planetarium?
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this is a really trong poem love ly use of language, like the repetition, it adds depth
nice write my poet friend
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Thank you.
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This is really good. More along of the lines of a song... I basically sung it in my head. Great write.
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Cool. Thanks.
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Yes, I got the idea from the song: Mad World.
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Cool
This is spectacular! , i feel i've heard this as a song -
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Cool. Thanks. Hehe.
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nice!
i really like this line a lot:
"My tears are inside my eyes like a leaf on a tree ready to fall."
it's so metaphorical.
great write.
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A great compliment. Thanks.
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Brilliantly done. It was a great write. Catchy and great flow
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Thanks Buddy.
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Excellent!
Hi there,
I love your poem.
And it’s so catchy.
Believe me!
I feel you.
Thanks.
Scarzat
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Thanks.
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