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Such a Savage Crime

His name was Jake,
such a beautiful boy, just another murder,
but I think not.
Legs broken with an iron pipe, face painted with make-up.
Groin stepped on with such force, you coulden't recognize it.
Blood under his nails,
an indication he fought back, but sadly lost the fierce fighting.
Three broken ribs,
Faggot, carved into his forehead,
as like a burned scarlet letter.
His skin, looked as if it was painted black and blue.
Can you imagine, walking into your lovers apartment,
to find him hanging there in his living room, naked and
swinging from the cord, wrapped around his neck.

Could you imagine, looking into his cold dead eyes
and seeing all the horrible things that had happened to him
so vividly it brings you to your knees.

Someone you loved, killed so savagely for the simple fact
that you loved him.




"Just another murder, these men did nothing wrong, no proof."

How could they?
He died in the most
brutal of ways,
and somehow, in the judge's judgemental eyes
it was his fault.
He brought it on.

80 hours of community service,
for persons life. A person I loved,

a person who was taken from me so

viciously and I will never feel his lips again.

Cruel men walking free, cruel men who will tell

all their friends how

"You know that faggot that got killed a couple of day age (he takes another drink of beer) "Yeah, I did it and I got away with it!!"

 

My love is in the ground, and

this man, still walks free,
for such a Savage Crime.

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Savage.
~Serenity

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  • CovertEnmity
    June 30

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    That was beautiful and heart wrenching.

    Wow I never knew it was ever possible for someone to evoke such emotion from me...You almost produced a tear!!! And that says a lot, trust me.

  • Wow, this was deeply emotional
    and powerful with the intensity
    of emotion your words display here.

    Great write indeed.

    Best of luck & thanks for entering


  • xXpuppyXx
    May 7
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    omg. i cried. i truely cried. it speaks to me in so many ways, but mostly because i can feel the hurt and pain in this persons voice. feel it within my own soul. nothing of this sort has ever happened to me, but i have felt the stares when i held her hand in public. amazing. i cant say anymore

  • its really sad!! thank you foe entering and good luck int eh contest. You did a really good job with the simplicity of the prompt


  • SaraTalon
    April 22
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    Damn! My eyes burn from withheld tears. Not as good Dark Alley, but still very sadly awsome

  • you can have it. Lets see your promt. I think it will be a word. ummm
    try "savage"

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