Swirling clouds
Suffocating the sun’s true nature,
Glistening colours banished by a world of dusty grey,
Whispers and calls you
Only to be met by bleakness,
Our world and it’s collide together,
When the waves break against the shore,
Creating unsettling aroma's which echo across the dreary, deserted beach,
Once consumed by playful laughter,
Once filled with colours,
Now engulfed by the haunting shimmers of grey,
Now forever lost amongst the waves of dusty grey
A contest entry
- Study in Black and White XIII by JinSays.
800 points, ended April 25, 10 entries
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Comments
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The word it's in the beginning of the third stanza really takes away from this piece. I think that's the only thing that hurts it, I keep reading it, and get snagged everytime. Still the somberness you write rhese words with is apparent. Definite emotion can be seen and felt here.
Excellent job with the prompt.
Love,
jin
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