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Show the world how living.....

Fall upon your gravestone
Ye protector of the dead
You'll not judge your corpses
For what they have not said

Smile unto the darkness
Stay hidden from the light
Let your smile dance
Making stars seem half as bright

Let the moans behind you
Compose a tragic song
Those that tried to bind you
Have been cowards all along

You're a Majestic king
Seated upon your stone
And no one in your graveyard
Shall ever feel alone

So sport your devious grin
And scare all sanity away
Show the world how living
The dead can be today

Author notes

Thanks for the revision tips Red!

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Comments

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  • Kathraina silver member
    July 20

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    Very good write.
    Great rhyme and flow here, and really good imagery.
    bravo


    ♥ Kate


  • Buggie.B
    April 25
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    This was a moving write.
    Good luck!


  • Grey Mouser
    April 24

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    Well told story with a great rhyme scheme. A dance of power showing the life of death that trolls the graveyards of undeath. Thanks for entering into the contest.
    Be well and be blessed.
    GM


    • Minstrel-Morose
      April 24
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      Although it wasn't a prize winner, I hope you were entertained

      • Grey Mouser
        April 25
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        Was an excellent write I did enjoy. Couldn't award a piece that didn't follow the rules though. I can let slip a few words over but almost 40 words over is not fair to those that stayed within the limit.
        Thanks for the read


  • Juggalette Sammy
    April 22

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    You wrote this poem so well! The imagery was great, and the words went together like a harmony. Good job!


  • eyesofanangel524
    April 22

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    Wow...nice take on the prompt. The flow ran like a well oiled machine. Best of luck in the contest.


  • redbarchettadrive gold member
    April 22
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    The epitome of spooky Max!
    Very Rod Serling(ish)
    You might want to edit to change the font on this to white so peeps can read it.

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