I see you.
Do you see me?
Do you realize I exist?
I think not.
I see right through you
and you don't even flinch
because everyone else
falls for your front.
I know the real you,
and you should be
very, very, afraid.
I see you now.
I'm in your tree,
outside your bedroom
window.
Sleep with one eye
open tonight Ryan.
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Penetrating Penning
Dear Poet
Thank you for entering my contest: PREWRITES
FOR BRONZE & SILVER TROPHY WINNERS, ONLY
I'm glad my name isn't "RYAN."
Best wishes and
stay
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yikes! Stalkers in the trees! That is very freaky!
The Positives:
Great short poem about one crazy girl I like that.
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
I know the real you,
and you should be
very, very, afraid.
I see you now.
I'm in your tree,
That was cleverly written I liked that
Overall:
I give this an 7/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
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Ohh spooky and disturbing! Great write though, welldone x
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This is just great. I love it. A little foreshadowing, a hint of danger, and maybe just because I'm me, a touch of humor as well. Very good. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck to you.
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Wow, this is awesome...
I'm kinda scared now
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Wow, this took an unexpected turn and I really like it. It builds up so much, and then the last line is just amazing. Adding the name at the end is a very good and chilling touch.
Wonderful write.
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