pitter patter on the floor
Sounds like heartbeats do implore
A sound of imagery from the door
Keeping note and making sure
Each paw is kept in store
Pitter patter of the paw
In the house and breaking law
The waking mess causing awe
In every room the scratch of claw
They've really pulled the last straw
Pitter patter of escape
Rips and tears in seams of drapes
In the doorway we can only gape
At torment of the house reshapes
That nothing can be fixed by tape
Pitter patter of the kittens
All the wrong that they christened
Now in my home will glisten
As they tread further to listen
I cry over what they did to my mittens
Author notes
Happy Birthday Kira!"
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Comments
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Congratulations on winning Gold.
peace
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this is an awesome write and loved the flow of the poem. Very good and best oi luck in my contest
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A very cute and adorable poem, with interesting mono-rhymes in each stanza. Best of luck, and thanks for entering my contest.
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This is really cute! Great work, good luck! (:
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A really adorable and delightful poem. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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I like this, it was cute. The whole time I could imagine the kittens causing havoc as they do in most cases. Good write
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Quite the cute and funny poem that was a pleasure to read. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering.
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This poem seemed as if you were trying to rhyme each end word with the first and I must say you did a very good job at it as well as keeping the flow of the poem up. I like this indeed. Thank you for sharing.;
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there are a few places i feel i need to control the flow better but im not sure what to change it to
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Oh wow this was awesome!!! Very well done. I really did enjoy it.
"Pitter patter of the paw
In the house and breaking law
The waking mess causing awe
In every room the scratch of claw
They've really pulled the last straw
Pitter patter of escape
Rips and tears in seams of drapes
In the doorway we can only gape
At torment of the house reshapes
That nothing can be fixed by tape"
I enjoyed these two stanzas. Again i say very well done. Thank you for sharing. -
Great poem well written
I really enjoyed reading it
Thank you for helping me celebrate my birthday. -
i like the rhythm of the poem --- it maintained a "pitter patter" type beat to it throughout the course of it. tis a little longer than 10-15 lines, though. but i'm not too strict.
i like how you didn't reveal the source of the "pitter pattering" until the last stanza, it ended on a cute, but mischievous note. thanks for enteringgg -
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MY BAD!! i didnt realize it was that long .. im sorry
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told ya you'd like it
romm = room ? lol
i think it's funny... did they really do that to your mittens? assuming it's about your cats. -
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i was spell checking while you were reading.
Gotta love word <3
lol yes they did those effing cats
But we love them -
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i wonder what they could do to your bath robe...
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