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You Don't Feel Me, Do You?

I walk even slower
One foot after another
My scared eyes look around and behind me
I can feel everything
But nothing can feel me
My heart pounds lost hopes and corrodes
Denial forces in new false hopes
My ears scream to me lost possibilities
This all broke into my life
Not to fix me up
Then I see old memories smiling at me
"Where does the good go?"
I felt the best part still existing and I won't let go
Then I fell through a dream
Landed on a hard cold floor
This is dead for me
And you just don't feel me

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  • flyfly gold member
    April 29
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    Very emotive.

    Well done Eevie, very descriptive of your feeling whilst writing. Thank you for sharing


  • carlylane
    April 22

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    Amazing.

    I love it... an amazing story and one I am sure we have all felt before... but hard to put in words.


  • TheFootballPlayer
    April 22
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    very intense, good write.