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The Demise of Colour

Morning comes to an empty room
beneath these hollow clouds.
Nobody wakes there
in crisp white sheets, because
sleep has lost all meaning.
Time rains down, dry, like
a clock on the ceiling is leaking years.
Waiting, biting your tongue
and nails, you stare back
at the cobwebs in the corners.
They groan as they grow and
nothing seems to escape their grasp
anymore.

You look small from above,crouching
in the centre of the room, possibly wondering
if you are the only one left.
I see faint circles around you
that you might have dreamed of, if you could.
Surrounding you, they pulse, and
with each contraction you blink, gnawing and shivering,
nearly mouselike.
The consistent nervous click of your teeth
causes the walls to quiver.

It's almost grey outside.
There were others, you know,
a while ago, but now they share a fate
with the gulls,
drifting through grey skies.
Grey-eyed and quiet, they fly.
And all you have is time.



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  • Gulfbreeze
    September 17

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    your talent to write is way beyond your years. You have tapped into the use of metaphors and imagery in such a way that your words lift off the page in 3D fashion, I am very impressed with your work, I look forward to discovering more of it. Thanks for sharing your work here, you should be proud.


  • metal4ever
    June 14
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    this is poetry if ive ever read it, keep up the awesomeeee work


  • decode
    May 23
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    this poem gives me a distinctly grey feeling.
    I like it.


  • retribusive
    May 1

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    This is amazing. Truly great. I can relate.. it's kind of how I'm feeling at the moment.

    Nice job.


  • coolkid69
    April 23

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    i loved how you took such a bleh topic and made it magnificent. it was very detailed and gave me that perception of a world w/o color.


  • yael
    April 21

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    hi some-girl-i-still-know-and-drink-orange-aide-with

    i like this style. its different from what you usually do.


  • rosedust
    April 21
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    this is very interesting...who is "you"?

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