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I'

 

 

m


seemed to be the only
key still working
on her olive typewriter


index finger moved
left to right
jabbing symbols

 

 

 

 - mentally -

 

 

 

 

 

as if next time
it would trip the switch
from her sanity
to her reasoning

 

and the sheet
of yellowed paper
would say more than



i l l

 

 

 

 

 

 m m m m

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prompt: diabolicus

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  • JinSays gold member
    May 6

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    I really really really love your way of thinking. What a wonderfully imaginative entry, thank you so much.
    Love,
    jin


  • euphoric-frenzy
    April 29
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    I think everyone is a bit mentally ill. Great write


  • Young Confusions
    April 29

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    I like how you put "i'm mentally ill" as sort of a hidden message..even though we can all see what it says it's still beind the actual poem, like the person is about is just normal on the outside, but ready to burst on the inside. Great write


  • maktub
    April 28

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    Strange....as if there is a story behind it...I began to create an images of the piece as I read it...very unusual, but I liked it. Sort of a classic, creepy, quirky...curious way about it.