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My Hearts Rainbow

 

 

 


I'll paint you a rainbow as a gift from me,
Drape it from the heavens for the whole world to see.
On a canvas of desire I'll mask all your fears,
With a stroke of my brush I'll dry all your tears.

 

I'll bring forth an aureole with feelings so deep,
My caress will be genteel, my touch you may keep.
On a palette of words I will tenderly blend,
Colorful thoughts, bright verses to send.

 

I'll paint for you a butterfly of reds, blues and gold,
Wings stretched like loving arms ready to enfold.
Then deep in the center of the most vibrant hue,
I'll etch from memory the essence of you.

 

I'll give rise to a rainbow, a bridge to my heart,
So loneliness and pain can begin to depart.
Just gaze to the sky when life hits a bend,
I painted a rainbow, I lie at the end.

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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Rhyme Me Rhyme Me by AliceinPoetryLand

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  • Sheilasbabygal4life gold member
    1 day ago
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    This was a very enjoyable piece to read. It was nicely done and good. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you in the contest.


  • happy kitty kat
    November 16

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    "I'll paint for you a butterfly of reds, blues and gold,
    Wings stretched like loving arms ready to enfold.
    Then deep in the center of the most vibrant hue,
    I'll etch from memory the essence of you." I loved this part it was so incredible. I loved the background it matched the poem perfect.

  • longhaircg
    November 16

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    I really enjoyed this painted love, thanks great write

  • tonyrothers
    November 16
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    Beautiful,evocative language-very touchin


  • Zero the Hero silver member
    November 16

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    A very well written rhyme poem ..i too write in rhyme but prefer every other line rhyming but you have the every line technique off to a T, it dosent feel forced and the flow and meter is excellent well done indeed and congratulations on recieving a gold trophy for your work. its a very touching piece and comes accross as heart felt

    good job


  • ArchCarXxx
    November 16

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    Beautiful! I love the message and the flow of words is wonderful! Very Good job! I really love this poem. ^_^


  • Curtain-Must-Fall
    November 16

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    The rhyming really works in this piece. The words are so gorgeous! As an overall piece of writing it is beautiful and so loving. As someone else said, it could be for a lover or a child- the beauty of the words are so tender. Very well done!


  • Your mirror
    November 16
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    woderful...


  • SillyGillysGirl
    November 16

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    This is lovely, versitile it can be for a child or a lover depending on ones interpretation. I found it delightul and comforting


  • Inconspicuous.
    November 16

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    Awww. this is adorable. your rhyming is done so well. Good job. this was so cute.


  • HiddenByTheDark
    May 29
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    awe. i really love this poem, it seems really light and fluffy hehe. greatttttt job hun. xoxo


  • volcaniclastic
    May 22
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    I liked this.


  • Amana Araya Jabari
    May 6
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    Tahts was so sweet and cute. <3


  • individuality gold member
    April 29

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    a good piece of poetry penned, nice flow and rhythm -
    My Hearts Rainbow - Rainbow is attached to the heart, so an apostrophe is needed, My Heart's Rainbow


  • David J Martin gold member
    April 28

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    Excellent

    I'll keep this short, as I am sure one of the seven deadly sins will become evident in my words Loved it. Loved the whole damn, brilliantly crafted thing. Rhyme, flow, subject matter... loved it all. The ending is still echoing in my head.

    Very nicely done,

    David.


  • oOHannahListerOo
    April 28

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    Wow

    I love this poem! It's gorgeous. Your emotions really shine through with beautiful imagery! Talented, I think so! Keep it up

    Hannah

    x

  • avermone
    April 28

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    the right words to say

    you have a true talent. the way you put your feelings into these words is special. expression like this comes from a deep place, be it pain, love, disappointment, loss, or even bliss you must have exprienced all


  • Xx.Toxic.xX
    April 24
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    a well deserved gold!

    this piece was beautiful, moving, and expressive. you did an amazing job.


  • SinfullyYoursLove
    April 24

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    o my...

    that wsa a really very good poem,i so loved it.i love the way you've conveyed your emotions!i loved the whole poem,but this one part's my fav'Then deep in the center of the most vibrant hue,
    I'll etch from memory the essence of you.'
    really good!


  • PurpleSky
    April 24

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    what a truly magnificent display of love. The ending was marvelous! thank you for an awesome read and congrats on that purdy gold trophy!
    huggles
    Lena


  • AliceinPoetryLand gold member
    April 23

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    Oh my this is just incredible. I love it! Beautiful imagery with such flawless rhyme and what an ending!
    Thanks so much for your entry
    Gaylene


  • liltulip gold member
    April 23

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    oh my

    this is just so beautiful, your words are tender and sweet and paint a lovely picture as well as a hug for the reader, especially the one it was intended for....so very lovely indeed! thank you for sharing!


  • Jade.Butterfly gold member
    April 23

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    Oh my, this was beautiful
    I loved the color you painted within.
    Such imagery you used.. i could almost see the butterfly
    A very touching and tender piece. I could feel the emotion throughout.The rhyme was amazing!
    Excellent job!
    -Mandi


  • Little Blue Bird
    April 23

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    Wow

    I love it and if you think about it this could be a spiritual poem too. I love the imagery and flow of your words. A very uplifting piece.


  • Myjoy gold member
    April 22

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    To tender, so well worth reading, and painting the picture within my mind. Well done, good luck. Lovely work.


  • geckogirl silver member
    April 22

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    sigh.. this is beautiful... the flow, the rhyme and the passion.. just perfect Del.... good luck


  • MuteForNow
    April 21

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    oh my gosh. reading this makes me feel like a crush. with each word, my throat choked a little more and through every line my heart raced faster.

    such a beautiful ending as well. you're definately at the end of my rainbow.


  • maralisa silver member
    April 21

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    aw this is wonderful I love your imagery and your rhyme and flow is beautiful good luck in the contestmaralisa

  • graybeard
    April 21

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    What can I say? Imagery, flow, rhyme all excellent as usual. I don't know why I haven't already, but if you wouldn't mind I'd like to add you to my favorites.


  • Kyuutan-megumi
    April 21
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    Dave...

    My dave that is a really beautiful poem I am so jelous of your skills. Good Job! Keep it up!

  • poetrynovice
    April 21

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    Great Use of Imagery!

    Great imagery and descriptive language really work to honor one of God's greatest natural gifts. Good luck in the contest. Well done!

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