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Exotic Cha am Skies

Exotic Cha am Skies

Oriental long tailed white dragons
Dragons racing towards the shore
Shore the assumed finishing line
Line demarked with gliterring shells
Shells with intricate designs and colour
Colour catching the glint of the moon
Moon the referee in this game
Game played by the rising tide
Tide trying desperately to salute
Salute the perfect halo
Halo of the glorious full moon
Moon illuminating the exotic Cha am skies

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  • kristy1116
    September 12

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    Good flow of words

    I love the imagery that you had in this poem. It painted a perfect picture in my mind. The way you used the last word to begin the next line also stood out to me. Congrats


  • PurpleSky
    April 28

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    very beautiful and tranquil. I love the peaceful manner in which it was written. As my friend pointed out I love the way you took the ending of each line and used that word to start the next. thanks for sharing this as it was a pleasure to read.
    huggles
    Lena

  • Mercury Rising
    April 28

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    Beautiful imagery, and a very lovely and lyrical exotic poem. My wife is Thai, so I especially loved this piece, even though I've never been to Cha Am, but have visited the general vicinity.

  • poetrynovice
    April 22
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    Nice!

    Great imagery and use of descriptive language. Thanks for sharing.


  • Myth
    April 22

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    That was very pretty; a great nature poem. I loved how you started each line with the last word of the previous line. It was a good read.

  • mina nagi
    April 22

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    I want to be at Cha am... beautifull description of nature wrapped up from ground to sky... typical of you and your style....it's like a ballroom dance pattern.... moving three steps forward and one step backward, forward and back again; so it goes on and on...
    you've managed to stitch everything in this poem... birds, tides, shells, colour, moon... your words have drawn an exotic painting in my mind...
    well done... keep it up...

    mina


  • Errant Panther gold member
    April 22

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    lovely work, the form and flow works well with the repetition of the last word from one line beginning the next, a couple of minor spelling faux pas "referee" is missing an "e" and "rising" missing an "i". glad to see your quill doesn't stray too far from you and hope to see you here more often

    • a u r a
      April 22
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      Gracias for your comment which I find most encouraging I have made the spelling corrections

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