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Setting Sun

today I saw my shadow
it fell beneath my feet
the sun had gone down

Author notes

no punctuation my choice

A contest entry

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  • Mariana gold member
    April 29

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    There is beauty in the brevity of this poem. Congratulations on another shiny Dad.

    Mariana  

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    April 21

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    At first read, I really didn't get the significance of this one... but alas, I never judge first read through and on this second go round it hit me like a ton of bricks slap in the middle of the face ( why I didn't see it the first time is beyond me). Quite the little powerhouse and not at all what I had expected that prompt to bring, but I love it when people think outside the box and surprise me with my own prompts. Well done poet!

    P.S. - I would have preferred that [i] been capped but then I guess my rules allowed for poetic license in this contest... it just looks out of place in this otherwise outstanding write.


    • wingsofgold25 silver member
      April 22
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      I thank you for the ( HM ) much appreciated.
      Thank you for the nice comment. I took your sugestion and capped the (I) you are right it looks much better.
      Constructive Critisism and Sugestions always welcome on any of my writings.

      Congrats. to the other winners.
      ED.