The cabin sits in the woods by the stream
no fire in the fireplace, doors open wide.
howls from the woods, strange lights at night
darkness creeps slowly up to the cabin
bright sun comes early
wake, go outside
strange tracks
Author notes
"duette" 7- line version
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What did you think
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short and powerful
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Great imagery in this short piece.
Good luck to you with it and thanks a lot
for your entry here!
Jeremy0826 -
this has some beautiful imagery and it's very nicely written. I would have preferred a longer write, but this is still great.
goodluck and thanks for entering
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I felt the feeling of the cabin. I could imagine this small place, out in the forest somewhere, and then I came along this line, and it reminded me of when it gets dark,
"darkness creeps slowly up to the cabin" and I felt the night, and my stomach twisted!
amazing.
Rose -
This is quite interesting, I think I read it again.
I liked the choice of words you used for imagery.
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Welcome to AllPoetry!
Reminds me of many days I have spent in the wodds. Like the imagery created. Now I just need to learn more about the form lol.
Welcome to AP and good luck in the contest.
Storm
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welcome to allpoetry
You did great, I love the glimpse of that cabin you have given, it makes me want more.
♥
Shawna
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I liked it. Very mysterious. It also had some great imagery. Great write.
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i loved this one you did a wonderful job good luck in the contest
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Welcome to Allpoetry
Very spooky. Well done!
Best of luck in the contest
-Mark -
Welcome to All Poetry
Such a potful of imagery here Very well writtten.
Yes, please do point out teh form you chose to write this on..
that helps..
Good luck in the contest
Cheers,
Archana
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Welcome to All Poetry~
Mystery enraps this piece about something that can follow us and leave a mystery.
A very good take on the 'duette' 7-line version. (could you place the form in with your author's notes for those who are not familiar with word count forms?)
Only thing I would do differently is eliminate
as much of the punctuation as possible.
Nice piece for the criteria!
Thank you. Warmly, CookieZeal
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Maybe you can help
How do I edit my poem. I really appreciate the feedback. I am not sure of myself when it comes to punctuation. Also what can I add to help with the "duette" form.
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Very good edit!
Punctuation is eliminated giving the duette that 'mystery'. An open end
conclusion means you leave it to the reader.
~ although this is an option, the duette even looks MORE obscure
if you do not use any capitals at the beginning of all lines but the
first.
Where you have "Word Count" under "Author Notes" is where you
would put "duette-7 line version"
Impressive change. Thank you!
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Welcome to Allpoetry
I like the odd feel to this poem, and the story it tells. I really like the mystery at the end
A great write.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to the site.
Laura.
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