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These Scars.

These Scars.


The world has darkened considerably
I'm out of character for this game;

The clouds enveloping overhead
Love always transforms to pain.

The colours of the world have gone
Faded all to black and gray,

All the love in the world has gone
It all has drifted away.

The empty streets are filled with memories
The world is not the same,

Scream with me, at the end:
I'm the one to blame.

And yet when I walk out of this life
I find the signs are still worth reading,

And the stars are still worth watching
If it only stopped the bleeding
Heart that I held on, near forever
These scars will stay forever.

I've never healed in this second life,
In this world of half dark and light.

I cannot see the colours that I held onto forever
And no longer are there any stars to see the scars,
Remember.

I cannot think;
I cannot heal;
I cannot breathe;
This isn't real;

This isn't life;
This isn't love;
This isn't me;
This isn't me.

And though the skies are dark with ash
And the sea is filled with fire;

Though my mind is filled with confusion
And my heart filled with desire...

Even though you ran away from a burning world
Away from a breaking, falling heart,

Even though you didn't catch me when my wings disappeared,
Even though you haven't been here...

I still love you,
In a colourless, loveless, heartless world.

I love you.






© NinjaGirl

Author notes

Artist: Secondhand Serenade
Song: Like A Knife
Link To Lyrics:http://www.lyricsmania.com/lyrics/secondhand_serenade_lyrics_8321/a_twist_in_my_story_lyrics_75505/like_a_knife_lyrics_750154.html

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  • Blue-Rose Beauty gold member
    November 10

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    Love always transforms to pain.

    Wow, that was a very strong line and I liked the poem.

    Some of the poem seemed a bit cliche, it seems like some of the lines have been used before except crafted a little differently.

    6/10

    Thanks for entering.

    - blue beauty


  • reckless abandon
    May 31
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    I really liked this poem a lot, it had a nice flow to it and I liked the rhyming that was there. Sometimes it felt a little repetitive, but I can tell that's how it must be meant to be. I also really like the inspiration you got from your song. The poem has the same sound to it as the song did, and I really like it. Thanks for entering!