When did the tears stop falling
When did my heart stop breaking
When the loneliness leaves me aching
then It would be so easy to ask
will you sleep with me tonight
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wow
this was stunning......you ask profound qusetions and then...you came about and hammer it in....yeah you are so adept in ding that ..only whe you are emotionally stable can u do anything physical right..... -
I know I read this before, but can't believe I didn't comment. Very poignant, heartfelt, I think we've all been there, but seldom can anyone put it into words they way you have.
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Thank you Dane, This one was easy to write as my ex went off to his bed and me to mine.
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what I love in this poem it leaves nothing to the imagination, it goes in straight for the kill
to the facts no questions asked well penned
I love this ...Hugs Angel♥
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Thank you Angel for the a wonderful comment, I'm glad you like it.
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Think we've all been there before I've had lots of heartache and I can feel your pain
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That is the best time to ask women for there company
But not very gentlmenly, thanks for sharing.
Be blessed in all you do.
Tony
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Lol, you are right about that but as a woman I don't have to be gentlmenly, lol.
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Great work here
Your emotion is very honest and real,
sort of feels like a wife struggle to be intimate with her husband because to love would hurt too much right now.
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Yes, to love would hurt too much right now.
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Nice work. So real an emotion, and it speaks to the breaking point that everyone has. I, personally, would try this one without the word "did" and see how that fits.
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yes I see what you mean, when I finish it I'll see how I want to go with it. Thank you for stopping by commenting, I glad you liked it.
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I really, really like this piece. It's short, but you manage to pack a lot in. Great, great work. I like your ending, it's really very powerful. Excellent work! Keep writing...
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Nice work Sharon! Good questions that you shared. FANTASTIC!
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