hydrometeors fall from uranus as i board the 4 o'clock shuttle. drenched with my own gnostic wonder i take an empty window seat next to no one. within a few minutes we pass a scene of carnage to the left, where i happen to be gazing.
three vehicles crumpled, one of them overturned. traffic is in slow motion as morbid fascination overcomes all the drivers ahead of us. i can see some twisted metal, body parts and a lot of blood. i think to myself of godly humor. it must all be funny to the gods. the way we are so attached to these frail vessels of fiber and flesh, and the way we can be so disconnected.
i visualize the pieces of brain and lung and bone and teeth coalesce into there original anatomies.
suddenly thanatos is seated at my side looking out the window with me. he explains to me in a jocular manner how unnecessary the suffering that will surely follow this perceived tragedy really is. from his perspective all that was lost here was the ability of spirit to falsely identify with form and interact with other confused entities. he thinks that is funny too, all these baffled exchanges. even he, the primordial personification of death, will die- with me. then we can do it all over again forever.
it is all a joke and the universe is always laughing.
with us or at us? that is the question. that is the part i care about.
when i finally reach my destination i bid thanatos farewell and think to myself, 'what an asshole.'
i exit the shuttle. the rain has stopped and helios decides to make an appearance.
i think about all my problems and laugh.
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- darkside by emoempess.
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some very choice words here, well presented! i enjoyed reading this poem very much and am inspired by it…
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THI IS DELICIOUSLY DARK IS IT NOT?
NICELY WRITTED
BRAVO
T
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dark and just kick ass. wow... you have a great storytelling ability and within that it's so nice to see how structured everything sounded. it was very .. intelligent ? not sure if thats the right word but i felt smarter after reading it lol
great work im looking forward to working with you!
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well done!
it is odd isn't it.....i drove by an accident upon which
a babys car seat was crumbled on the ground,
and everyone just honked their horns to get around
them.
i kinda of wondered silently, are well being conditioned
to live in some manic apathy...because we sure
scream out when it happens to us...now don't we!
Way to write it!
ears/Seattle
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grusome...loved it
i really like the way you depicted a tragedy with the mundane humdrum of everyday life, nice dichotomy.... and quite cynical... thanks
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funny, and gorey.
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This is really superb. The sort of reflection that leaves your pondering your own existence. I enjoy philosophy like thoughts such as these. Great write!
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wow, this is fantastic. is this part of a series? i suppose i'll find out in a few moments when i go back to your page.
really loved this... you paint a story with a haunting message. the surreal aspect of it fits well.
-cassidy
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thank you
i see how you could see this as part of a series with helios making a cameo towards the end, it just got sunny at that part. but i must say that is a very interesting idea. i think you may be on to something here, a surrealist series or any type of really short stories that connect would be awesome. you just inspred something. i dont know what it is yet but something is coming together in my mind. thanks again!
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"when i finally reach my destination i bid thanatos farewell and think to myself, 'what an asshole.' "
this whole piece was interesting, but that line cracked me up. The gods of Greek mythology are indeed an uncompassionate bunch.
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perfect
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Vivid...
You painted a scene with this.
i visualize the pieces of brain and lung and bone and teeth coalesce into there original anatomies
I can actually see everything that this poem is talking about.
Nice work.
*~Allison~*
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thank you!
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