I'm hungry. I need a place to stay. I need food. Feed me. Does anybody have a dollar I can spare? I just need a meal please. Does anybody need a hard working woman? I...I was once a hard worker. I used to clean houses, and then I got laid off. I stopped praying. Why, I completely lost faith! I'm so scared. I need help. Oh God, please forgive me! I'm so, so, alone. I'm so tired of seeing these successful people with their cell phone. Why, even the young ones have cell phones. What a mess I am! I need to get myself together. I really do. Just like flowers never thirst for rain, please help me. I'm going insane. I need some food, clothes, shelter, and water too. If you have these things be very grateful. Why, I once had everything I needed, and now all I have is my life. I've got my vision, hearing, and taste still. But all I see is my depression. All I hear are people passing me by. And I'm so hungry I can't taste anything. Sure I can walk, but I've got no where to go. Someone please pray for me. I just need someone to give me a chance. Please, I'm so hungry. I feel so dizzy. Feed me. (She faints.)
What will happen next?
Who will feed the poor?
Author notes
This is fiction.
Picture taken from Google.com
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There is no picture necessary, you paint the imagery well of so many unfortunate individuals right now. And how sad the loss of faith comes so quickly when we are coveting the replaceable items others feel they cannot live without....cell phones, ugh! Throw them all away, they have created more harm than good. Technology has increased broken marriages immensely in my opinion. Nobody has a "cool off" period and just say what comes to mind. Very sad. Nicely written, well expressed and good imagery.
Leance
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I didn't see the picture, but you painted a bleak one that was, unfortunately, easy to see......so many people that are homeless and hungry...
great imagery and depth
nice job!
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your poem makes me sad and thankful. i care about all social issues, poverty, abuse and mental health. i want to help people and make awareness.
thank you for sharing this raw piece. love love
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SAD BUT OFTEN TRUE
There are those out there who have fallen so very far from what they once were. Not because they stopped trying but because of what society has become. All these people need is some understanding and love, something most have forgotten all about in this new age.
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Intense. You're a talented writer.
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I recently went to Kenya to build wells for the thirsty.
In Kenya there is this stream about 2-3 miles away.
I met a small child named Margaret. She had to walk 2 miles everyday just to get water for her WHOLE family. She was 6 years old.
When I was 6 I was tucked into bed, fed and reminded of everything that I had to do. I had simple tasks. But for a child of 6 to walk that far everyday.
When I got home from Kenya I became less selfish. I go through alot of problem and yes I complain through poetry but I will never forget that I have it easy.
I believe if one is poor we all should be poor.
I feed the hungry.
Great write.
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I really love this! Beautiful choice of words, awesome meaning and great flow. This poem needed to be written, a nice reach outward into the world. Good imagination for being able to feel all this and say it with such grace. Amazing
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Excellent
WOW!!!!!
What a fantastic write.
There is too much of this going on in real life today.
People in this predicament, should be able to get all of the help they can get.
Their voices need to be heard.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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This is excellent you did a really good job on this write, very smoothly flowing.
I love this poem because your willing to work for what you get. Thank you for sharing and it was a pleasure to read
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OMG honey. i havnet read anything that has moved me to tears in a very long time, but this write has done just that. I have been homeless more than once and i can definitely tell you that i have had this exact same thought process going. I could remember back when i used to play my guitar on the street corner to make a little money just so i wouldn't starve. you did a wonderful job writing this. it almost seems like you ripped some of the repressed thoughts right out of my head. Simply amazing.
Rob
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Even if it's fiction...it's a reality
On the average day, I'll encounter anywhere's between 200 to 300 people on the streets...each has it's own demons to fight, it's needs to be answered...or as simple as just wanting some attention...From first hand experience, by being in a shelter for 13 months, which is as far as I'm concerned...is Hell in one of it's worst forms...hungry...cold (in winter), lead in circles...it's a whole different world out there, which sadly to say...everyone's going to experience in the end times...As for myself...I've had it all at one time...literally had it all...which was lost. It's like going from the "penthouse, to the outhouse" I've gotten out of the cracks & crevices and is at least on "ground level" Time plays a role...only it's determined by higher forces than myself...I have my faith in my guardian angels and Him
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The world has lost touch with what it truly means to be human, when all we seem to see is the next big gadget for putting under the xmas tree.
All of humanity perhaps not yet we know the vast majority are driven by the disease I call life in the modern day and age.
I like it, I like it so!
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Wonderful
very creative and so well expressed. thank you for sharing
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True Stuff
This is all so true. The future is so close but we can never know how it will play out -
very nice piece keep the coming. it is nice to read you.
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This reminds me of someone I was talking to online recently; someone who I'm never sure do I really believe, but she was saying how she had to pay vet bills for her dog, and had no food, nor money to buy it with, for five days to come - and, I thought to myself, whether she's telling the truth or not, there ARE many people in the world who live like this, hand to mouth - and who helps them? ...
Excellent write
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great message who will help the poor if not us...
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This is a great piece of prose. It really fits with the thoughts of being homeless. It makes you wonder what you can do to help.
Well done.
Mike
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i have some midget gems, little fruit based sweets, but they are mine lol and i am very tight. okay, you can have one, make it last though! i am not made of midget gems. a good piece.
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i can relate to every thing but the being a girl thing because i'm a guy lol....but good stuff
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i like the way you have put yourself in this woman's shoes..It makes her pleas much more effective. Certainly a position that none of us would wish to be in, and if we were, would hope that someone would hold out a helping hand to us. This seems like prose more than poetry, but I really enjoyed the read and the atmosphere that you built up. I think in the first line, leading on to the second, it should be "does anyone have a dollar they can spare " rather than "I can spare"
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This is a very interesting and heart-felt piece. I would have liked it more if it were in the form of a poem (not in a paragraph form, like prose). I'm just wondering about the fifth sentence, should it read "Does anyone have a dollar to spare?" or "Does anyone have a dollar they can spare?" rather than the way it is written now: "Does anyone have a dollar I can spare?" Anyway, you have captured the total despair and desperation of this person's life. Good work!! I'm wishing you all the best, always. Take care and keep your muse's pen flowing... xx Cyn xx
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This is a great poem, Tiffany. I can feel the pain of the person in the poem. They sound so desolate and melancholy. What a sad peice.
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now this is really good. I can feel the pain and the hunger, the desperation. good good job!!!!
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I love how you really created the voice of a woman, instead of you just writing about her. It made her so much more real, and I could literally see her, begging people for just a little bit to eat or drink. I love how real it was, and of course it is very sad, because fact is that this is reality for some. Good job!
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This is a really strong and empathetic piece of writing crafted with skill
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Excellent write. I think being homeless would be enough to drive her crazy. It's hard to get out of this kind of situation. I have known a few women like this at a drop in centre I go to. It's a terrible place to be.
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Wow. Simply speechless...
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wow
this is a great poem
I don't know what to
say I've gone speechless
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