I come upon oceans too deep to swim. So all I do is stare at the view.
It’s so hard to reach for the stars. So I just watch them glow. If I could have reached them I guess I’ll never know. I see birds that fly so high. It seems so easy to glide in the sky, but yet, it’s so hard and I never even try to plan a flight mission.
I come upon oceans too deep to swim. So all I do is stare at the view.
I don’t know what success is? Someone will let me know. All I do is fail, but now I’m ready to try.
Pebbles roll into the sea, and rainbows paint the sky so beautifully. I don’t think I can go that far today…
I come across oceans too deep to swim. So all I do is stare at the view. Now I’m ready to try, but I don’t know how.
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Hmm
I can relate to that very much so.
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Excellent
I, for one, am truly enjoying being here reading your poetry.
What a perfectly penned piece of poetry.
Well done.
Keep up with the great work.
Keep on penning.
Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us.
*S* Cynthia
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There are times when life says to us "Why don't you step up to the plate and giving it your best try?" yet most of the time our minds sit in self-doubt, there are even those who would put you down, you can even hear them say "That person will never amount to anything, too afraid to even try".
Well let go of all those inhibitions and release your spirit to the wind, let it be your guide.
Living this life, I have seen it first hand, some would say I am the modern day hermit, someone living a reclusive life yet I just don't know how to say this any other way.
Take a look at yourself, can you see that desire burning inside you.
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Wow this is such a beautiful poem the picture of the scenery is so beautiful as well. Thank you for sharing
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wow...this is very intense!..the write is so lovely..the flow is just write..although there are some areas that I think can be softer..but on the other hand..having them there make a greater impact..i love the repeating lines "I come across oceans too deep to swim"...lovely line..good job!
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Gotta love the apprehension in life. The uncertainty of it all is so tasty.
Cheers.
btw thanks for the comment.
-Britny
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oh my this is so full of imagery
soul searchingly beautiful
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Incredible
I understand every word.
It is like the saying,
"It's easier to say it than to do it"
Magnificent
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I had a dream like this before I went back to college. An enormous bridge over the ocean which dipped right into it & I never thought I'd make it across. Anyway, I like the use of repetition. 'pebbles roll into the sea' is a great line. I like what you've done here & I would love to see more image-heavy lines like that!
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I get the feeling here of someone who doesn't have the confidence to go for things, they think they will fail, so never find out, because they never get to try...I guess there are people that get into that kind of cycle...just a suggestion, but the aesthetic look of this poem would be much improved if it was set out line for line, rather than strung together like prose...great picture....Reveller
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a good poem - may i make a suggestion? perhaps breaking this up a little so it is not flowing across but more have it like a line to line for eg:
So all I do is stare at the view.
Now I’m ready to try, but I don’t know how.
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This is so beautiful. It has two lines that repeat like a chorus to a song that I really like. I love the pictures that the poem creates.
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I think we can do all those things. Our poetry can create rainbows Our imagination can help us soar above the clouds. I dream about my body flying or more like gliding many times.
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Very Good!
I don't believe that all you do is fail. -
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Thanks.
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