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Sweet Camillia Sunset

Sweet camillia sunset,
spread across the Southern sky.
Red, like a blushing lover.
Soft, like a southern snow.

Embracing the far western sky,
glowing crimson the industrial metropolis.
Suddenly, the city seems to stop,
captivated, embraces gentle petals of clouds.

Horizon swallows the glowing flower.
Hungry, like a glutton.

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 22
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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is a really good poem - I like the imagery that you have used here I don't think that there is anything that I can comment on to do with criticism here I enjoyed this poem!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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  • raspberry Greeters member
    April 21

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    sunset... always a poet's first lvoe i guess..

    Beautiful.. thanks for sharing it with us here. Do write more..

    Welcome to the site.. hope u enjoy beign aorund