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First Love

A first love takes your breath away,
makes you wish for nothing more.
For it's what you have always dreamed of,
what you have always longed for.


The magic of the heart
that sweeps you away to a dream world.
The mirage that things can't get any better,
you are in love, with being in love.
 

The piece of your heart that solidifies,
given to that person with all your soul,
never to be given again.
So choose wisely and know
that only your heart can decide.
 

It is a miracle in the best of forms,
two people drawn together by fate,
by love, and by everything they do not know.
The leap, the jump, all in the unknown,
because there is nothing better,
then to be young and in love.

 
Those first moments can never be replaced,
and can never be repeated,
just as they are, perfect in every way,
even if only for a time or just a single moment.


Never take it for granted,
never think it's the end,
it's only the beginning.

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  • sinkfloridasink
    April 29

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    haha this made me think of my first girlfriend. This was a very beautiful poem, its well written and overrall you did a great job on it.


  • glenn shannon silver member
    April 26

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    how true this is the first love the innosence and intensity never recaputuered thou we try and find it only in part . took me back and i know that first love is the feeling ive been chasing my entire life but it eludes me. thank you for this walk down memory lane


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    April 22

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    Welcome to AllPoetry

    Thriving on love and a swirl of emotions this poem glides down the page engaging the reader from beginning to end

    Beautifully expressed, the only suggestion I have is perhaps you could fix the spacing as the gaps between lines within a stanza make it a little difficult to read - Just a thought

    Excellent poem

    Keep Writing!
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  • silverscent gold member
    April 21

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    This is a inspiring piece.

    Your words swept me in and enchanted me with the beauty that love is.
    I enjoyed how you painted love in a truthful sense instead of a fairytale, soppy one.

    If you don't mind me saying, there were just a couple of errors in there. On the very first line, it should be "breath" and on the second line of the third stanza it should be "soul."

    Thanks for sharing. Keep up the good work.

    • carlylane
      April 21
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      Thanks, it's always nice to get feedback and I am glad people are inspired by my writing. It's my release and all very dear to my heart.

      And another thank you for the corrections... that is why I shouldn't write late at night

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