Sculpted sand settles in shapes
teases the mind like cloud forms
to those who live in the wetlands.
Golds, yellows, oranges and reds
the desert is a sunset which can be
traversed by the humble strength of camels.
Indeed the sky alters the landscape shades
on the whim of sun's position, sparkles
off the salt and crystal, embedded in layers.
Shadows sway like belly dancers
as they waver and ripple in the heat
or as they cross the myriad sand speed bumps.
Under the night sky the stars cry out
with all the clarity of the sun during the day
sparkling so brightly as if painted on canvas.
The moon glow turns the sand metallic
the ghostly movements of sand shapes
stirring as the cold settles downwards.
The wetland dwellers call the desert lifeless
but we know it as full of life, wise in solitude
and crafty in wits.
Even the visitor sees the life of course
when the rains come, the flowers bloom
and the earth turns green in envy.
Author notes
Picture prompt can be found on contest page = http://allpoetry.com/contest/2444109
A contest entry
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Well gold trophy well deserved! I really like your poetry. You seem to have a PERFECT flow with it each time. All this imagery just coming from desert's sand, I dont know if I could do that yet. You seem to have a gift for taking the littlest of things, and are able to expand it into true beauty. Good job!!!!!!!
Favorite line btw:
"Shadows sway like belly dancers
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Thank you
I am very glad you like it, this is one of my personal favs among my pieces.
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JUDGED!
Gorgeous! I'm glad you changed the background cause it could be worth a trophy.
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The background makes this hard to read and makes me not even want to read this poem, please change the background or text to something clearer and I will return -
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Hope that helps
Still trying to keep sand sort of colours to fit the poem but hopefully this is more visible to you, if not I will just change it to a black background and white font. -
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This is fine, thank you!
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I loved this poem It really was just plain wonderful!!
The Positives:
great imagery in this it really sucked in the reader
Room For Improvement:
Nothing I can see you did wonderful
My Favorite Part:
Under the night sky the stars cry out
with all the clarity of the sun during the day
sparkling so brightly as if painted on canvas.
The moon glow turns the sand metallic
the ghostly movements of sand shapes
stirring as the cold settles downwards.
Wow that is just plain great I really love this part
Overall:
I give this an 9/10 you did great. I hope to see you in my future contests thanks so much for entering.
~*~Apathetic Poison~*~
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Nephew...how tastefully and remarkably written in such imagery....This is an outstanding write of descriptiveness, of mood and word choices..One of your best I have seen..The mood of the desert and wetlands, is certainly made clear here! a.
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A beautiful write, rich in texture and imagery.. Thank you so much for entering..
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Wow, Mike this is absolutely stunning!
You've amazed me once again!
Marvelous write and best of luck my brother
♥ Katie
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Stunning write, dear. The Imagery was beautiful, your words always so elegantly written and displayed.
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Little Brother,
What a great read this one is! I love it! You really show some great images, thoughts, and feelings in this one! Great job!!
Best of luck in this contest!
and love
Nyetta
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