heavy breathing in my ear
i feel no shame when you are near
my heart beats heavy in my chest
as you lay your head upon my breast
my blood races through my veins
my spine arches as i feel the pain
the sharp sensation on my throat
the morphine makes my body float
the pressure in my veins then build
the relentless sucking shows no guilt
a climax has been reached thus far
our scores are not yet up to par
the total count has not been tallied
opposing forces have not been rallied
the fire runs straight through my blood
from your mouth to my toungue
my thoughts flash blindly through my mind
i see my life before my eyes
your breath is in my ear again
whispering snippets of deadly sin
your thoughts of what you'll do to me
i open my eyes but still can't see
the things you whisper makes me sick
i try to find what makes you tick
the pain subsides my body's numb
like i drank a bottle of rum
i want to run away from this place
my vision returns and i'm struck by your face
i see the eyes and soft brown curls
the beauty so stricking it's not of this world
behind your eyes i see hatred and malice
i've gone in the rabbit hole and am lost like alice
you grin and you laugh showing your teeth
you have us pinned with me underneath
i toss and i turn, i try to get out
you laugh at persistence as i kick, scream, and shout
i close my eyes, grit my teeth
still my body from my head to my feet
your quite angry by my death facade
you flash your fangs and end my life today
A contest entry
- Crawling out of the nightmare I've become by CrystalLizard.
1000 points, ended June 11, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Breathe your thoughts with which you sympathize. the victim or the killer?
Comments
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Woah, what a story! I certainly sympathize with the victim here.... You have some wonderful descriptions, and your rhyme is good throughout most of the piece (it's a bit forced in places when you're lines get a little long). There are a few grammatical/spelling issues that can be easily fixed. Thank you so much for your entry, and good luck (and keep on writing!!).
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very nice i like the whole concept of the poem ......keep up the writing!


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nicely done..especially for a first poem!



