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Under God's Eyes

In a swirl of smoke
You were concieved
Through pain and rape
We were decieved

My heart was torn
Suddenly berieved
In any other moment
I wouldn't have believed

Fear swung its doors open
And drug me into it's lair
If I didn't know better
I wouldn't have cared

Into this dark cloud
Life was compaired
Thinking of you; the pain
It couldn't be bared

The lights were on me
My choice had been made
Inside my womb
You just couldn't stay

Under the night's stars
I sit and I pray
For no one else
To make a choice this way

Author notes

Ok, I know... no life and strife... but hey I rhyme a lot in my poetry and this is just what hit me when I read the contest description.
It is not personal

I write a lot of poetry that comes from just putting myself in another persons shoes.

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  • krissa leigh
    April 22
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    its very... creative

    i came across this accidentally, I am supposed to be writing a report on abortion, but i like it...

  • This is great. Very powerful. Yo do use rhyme well. I think this captures the trauma that abortion can bring, the difficulty of the decision and then the sadness that sometimes comes afterward. Thank you for entering and letting me read this!