your mirror doesn't reflect 'me' anymore
at least, not the 'me' of truth
the face of open warmth
the simple smile
the smallest gesture a
reflection can make
it is not 'me'
ME is
the truth that cannot be reflected
I must be touched, tasted, experienced
loved...
but never trapped within
the glass of possession
A contest entry
- Stripped Down Free Verse by Dalaney.
1050 points, ended April 23, 17 entries
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Possession...! It takes more courage to be than to have...! A very nice creation, I really appreciated it...!
Peace be always by your side...!
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I like your perspective here, Amanush, you have great insight into my words. Thanks for visiting. Peace to you also, Rhonda
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this seems powerful..intriguing..i loved it,best part was the end part..great job
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Thanks for visiting my pages. I appreciate your generous comment.
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I really enjoyed the idea of the -Me- being trapped in the mirror ties in excellent with the title-yes, a very good poem...peace
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Thank you Michael P. for visiting and your kind comment. Peace to you also, Rhonda
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this is a very very good poem that i so adored !
the truth that cannot be reflected
I must be touched, tasted, experienced loved...
stunning words ! glass of possession !! yeah
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WOW...thank you for such an enthusiastic comment. I too love the line"glass of possession", but that's kinda obvious huh? LOL Thanks again. Peace, Rhonda
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if anybody knows about trying to posess another it would be Angelo.
There is nothing selfish in this write. And I'm sure you meant it. Don't back down. Is a good write.
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Thanks for your encouragement, my friend. I must tell you that I do know "Angelo" and I have not experienced him in the way you portray here. His words do not trouble me, they only give me the ability to revisit the poem and draw another's perspective which is all I ask of those who comment on my poems. Thanks again for your very kind comment. I won't back down! and I am pleased you find this a good write! Peace, Rhonda
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Usually we like to posses others than be possessed our self's
I find this selfish and it ac-cures in most cases
It is mans nature since the fall that bugged him into possessing matter becoming greedy and ruthless
I do find this write to be selfishly written, it is not like you dear friend
I am sure you just wrote it for the contest, without meaning any of it really
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I didn't feel any selfishness as I wrote this...it is a poem indicative of a controlling relationship. We hope that we will see ourselves reflected in the life and eyes of our 'lover', and when we see only the lover's desires and expectations, we are no longer part of two become one, but consumed by one into itself...I hope this helps you to see the intent of the words, Nick. And thanks so very much for the sweet compliment of this 'selfishness' being-"not like {me}". Peace to you, Rhonda
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you will never be locked behind glass, sweet poetess....
thank you.
love, lane
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I believe that before a relationship is formed that 'me' of which you speak should be confirmed so that later when the outer begins to leave, the inner shines through even more.
Nice poetry here.
Paul
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The question of difference between partiality and open vision, possession and freedom is expressed really well here.
What is most interesting to me is: how this can read as if only addressed to 'another'- 'your mirror...'
Whereas it seems to me that the importance of making the very same address to one's own self first, may best be made first. To be with a question of how we posses and limit our own selves.
It does read this way but only if the 'your...' is seen as an address to one's own 'small self' from the larger and not just the implication of lack in 'another'.
At the end of the day, we know it works either way, because there is no 'another' anyway and it's just to do with how we hold our understanding of it all. The main point for me, is that the limitations we most suffer, is often from the way of our own illusory self possession, the way we 'trap ourselves in the glass' and not those imposed on us outside of this.
... Great write... see what it did to me, my sister!
Please excuse me for going on so...
must be topical for me at present,
in fact definitely so... so thanks.
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The words touch each heart uniquely, but...
You got it perfectly, Brother...perfectly...it is both...a two-sided mirror, if you will...
"this can read as if only addressed to 'another'- 'your mirror...' ...
To be with a question of how we posses and limit our own selves. ...
and the the way we 'trap ourselves in the glass' and not those imposed on us outside of this."
...Spot on, Dear Brother...thank you for 'getting it'...Peace always, Rhonda
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Truth spoken
"Possession" really remains always in a glass room which may break into pieces any time. Yea the real "Me" can only be experienced or felt or realized but never be trapped.
Your words are full of truth. Very well done.
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Oh wow, so simple but dreadfully profoud, yes it is like a picture, things can't be captured in a single image, a single word, or sentence. A person is more intricate than any first impression and that is a great message to convey.
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ME is
the truth that cannot be reflected
I must be touched, tasted, experienced
loved...
Brilliant! This is the core of the write for me.
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Been a while, but you still got it.
Always do!
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My chest puffs up, my eyes widen, my lips purse to a crescent moon smile and I think, "Atta girl!"
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goodness
this is very powerful! and so full of truth, one ofd the best pieces i've read today, good work my friend..lots of luck in the contest as well.
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