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paper cut

 

 

 

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I walked on ice
through the door
and then laid on it
in bed

      with you

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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I believed them
when they said

it was only
a signature on paper
and only
exchanged words

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

~~~

 

now
making conversation
reminds me of
origami

as we fold each
sentence
away from the last

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

~~~~

 

do you remember
the headlines on
our wedding day?

I do.

 

 

 

 

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  • Saffron gold member
    May 11

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    I loved these vignettes—my gut reaction to the second vignette was that it’s so sad that so many people view marriage vows just like that—disposable. I think you have described that well. I also liked the way you described conversations as being origami with the folding away of sentences—very nice.

    Thank you for sharing your talent with me in this contest.

    Saffron


  • sweet arrival gold member
    April 19

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    WOW... WOW... this is so powerful in vignette form.... INCREDIBLE!

    'as we fold each
    sentence
    away from the last'

    loved those lines... and the last stanza.... no word can describe the gentle gasp noise i made reading it... haha.. ok, im weird, but i did.
    precious GOLD!