I walked into a very large room with legs barely able
That’s when I saw all of them sitting at a large table.
Some were laughing, some crying, some just looked sad
When I realized who was sitting at the end, was my Dad.
Something here was not right, I just seemed not to fit
Then I looked at my grandfather, he turned away and spit.
What was going on? There were relatives in all the chairs
As I looked up and down the table, all I got were stares.
There were Aunts and Uncles and cousins not seen for years
The other side of the table, I noticed my brother in tears.
My Mom was sitting near the end of the table next to my Dad
When she looked up, I could see her eyes were unearthly sad
I attemped to walk over to give comfort to my beloved mother
But my legs didn't work, it was like they belonged to another
What was going on here and why were all of them not talking?
And why was I paralyzed, what had stopped me from my walking?
My heart started beating fast and I just wanted to scream
What was everyone doing here in this most strange scene?
Then someone spoke but I couldn’t tell from where it came
The words though were very clear, it was about my shame.
Another one spoke of the selfishness of my eternal being
It was loud, it was sharp, cold and most of all very mean.
You never cared about anyone but yourself, someone shouted
A brat from the day your were born, a man’s voice spouted.
Something strange caught my eye as I looked at all who sat
Two chairs in this place were occupied by a dog and a cat!
But wait! these were my pets that I had known so very well
I could hear their thoughts and they had something to tell.
Why oh Why! did you always pull my tail when you were young?
You would chase me and hit me and then stick out your tongue
And for me it was worse, for I was once your most beloved cat
For 18 years I loved you and all I got was "shoo" and "scat"
This was just too much as I looked across all their faces
For their words were so true, all the times and the places.
Then she caught my eye; the one and only love of this life
It was my best friend, my soul mate, my most wonderful wife
Just when I thought I couldn’t take even one minute more
I shot up from my bed, completley drenched in sweat galore
Oh! Thank goodness it was just one of those crazy dreams
So happy there on the edge of my bed, I almost screamed.
Funny thing was that everyone in my dream had passed away
But that was not right, my wife's in bed with me this day.
I grabbed her hand in comfort from this dream I'd been on
But there was no pulse! Oh yes! She was cold dead and gone!
Author notes
Most of my poems come from dreams. I wake up and only remember bits and pieces, but it's usually enough to know the main point so I just take it from there and write away. This dream was indeed very strange!
A contest entry
- A Writer's Journal by Raven Tears.
1050 points, ends November 28, 24 entries
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Good gods, for a minute there I honestly thought this was a TRUE story, I'm even relieved that it wasn't, you were pretty, blunt about the passing of your dear wife
no offense.
I could relate to this though, I too have strange dreams, especially when fly maggots turn into small baby animals...yes...moving right along.
Anyway all in all this was very interesting to read, you kept me interested right through, well done!
Thankyou for being apart of my contest.
Raven Tears
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a chilling story that hits the heart hard! Well written, dear poet!
You have a great sense of storytelling, while keeping poetic form. Good solid rhyme, and good flow and meter.
a brilliant and thought provoking read that carries the reader right along.
thank you for sharing,
all my best,
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thank you for entering
wow
this piece was amazing, i thought you or someone had died/ committed suicide. This piece has so much in it and i just love it, it says so much and the imagery was fantastic. Just brilliant! An amazing write here and i love it again.
Thank you for entering and good luck!
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Wow, for a minute I thought you’d committed suicide and you were a ghost who had walked in on them talking about you. This was a very eerie tale, which got me thinking in the end. Quite a twist of events. Nicely done. Thanks so much for entering my contest. It’s an honor read your fine work!
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Wonderful-Profound...
This ignites the turbines of imagination right from the first stanza. It takes the reader on a tour through the location of a production of long length motion picture.
I have enjoyed the reading of "The table", an impressive poem flowing with rich imagery; entertaining the creative mind, and nourishing the growing soul... A poetic majestic beauty.
In respect and admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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very chilling! seemed very real! dont know what to say on this one, but its such a good write. x
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A very chilling poem. scary to a point where I look at my own past life and wonder -- but no, I am content, I forgive me.
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Excellent
We are our own worst critic.
( Although I am not concerned about 'what others think of me',
I am gravely concerned, with what I think of my 'Self ).
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Chilling. I like the unexpected ending. Very nicely written.
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Such emotion, such passion! My goodness...my favourite part was:
"I attemped to walk over to give comfort to my beloved mother
But my legs didn't work, it was like they belonged to another.
What was going on here? and why were all of them not talking?
And why was I paralyzed, what had stopped me from my walking?"
It truly portrayed that emotion. Thanks for sharing this as well. -
woah. this gave me chills as i read it. very well done. the ending was unexpected, as stated below. i loved this!! keep up the good work! thanks for entering and good luck in my contest!
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Spooky
Good write for the challenge and holds one in it's grip until the unexpected end. Way to go!
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What an eerie write this is...one that sends chills up ones spine.
Great rhyme
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What an eerie write this is...one that sends chills up ones spine.
Great rhyme
**Ktulu Blackwolfe** -
Wow..this is an eerie write.
Hooked me in from beginning to end.
Very well written...fits the challenge superbly.
Well done poet.
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