As angry words attack my ears
and accusations fly
I try hard to hold back the tears
and beg to question why?
I put the phone down once again
because the line is hot
Inside I feel a burning pain
as if my gut will rot.
I hear the door upon the latch
a voice calls out" hello"
I see warm hands that hold a patch
that says "I love you so".
An angels arms are here right now
To take my pain away
Not ever asking "why" or how"
It's there I want to stay.
The phone is ringing in my ear
I put the call on hold
My angel draws me very near
the argument goes cold.
Author notes
Prompt " In the arms of an angel"
A contest entry
- IN THE ARMS OF AN ANGEL by eyesofanangel524.
900 points, ended May 12, 35 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Beautiful tempo. Flows gently off ones tongue. Nicely done. Thank you for entering and best of luck to y ou. May your ink never cease to flow
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Oh, highly lyrical and just a excellent and most delightful poem. Gorgeous I loved the classic feel and sound of it! wonderful! bravo!
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Many thanks for your lovely comments
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What a lovly poem
How sweet and lyrical, both word and sway tempo.
I felt a smile begin with the second line and it was firmly fixed by the end. very emotive, well written.
It deserves 9 for the empathy it contains. Well done Gwenevere, and thank you for sharing this lovely write.
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Thankyou so much for commenting, Ros
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Excellent write my friend, the form is excellent but does not overpower the message.
Great stuff, soft and tender
Jeff
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There's a strength which runs through this write, which doesn't allow the rhyming to trivialise it in any way.
The first two stanzas are quite 'gut wrenching' and then the 'angel' which also allows for a bravery of standing strong in your own place, with its aid.
The rhyming takes second place to the message, sitting relatively quiet in its place... which I very much like.
A great write Ros!
Keep well my friend,
Sol 
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Thankyou Sol
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