Aching heart, as I dream of you
Going through the motions
Of feeling deep oceanic blue
Never ending red tears that I protrude
Your my addiction, I now conclude
{acknowledge defeat; from the thirst of you!}
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Prompt-Agony
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Comments
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oh wow another excellent one. You guys and gals are really making this so hard to judge. The more I read the more of them I find that I like. thanks for sharing this with us. And thanks for entering it into my contest.
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Just wonderful. I love this. The feeling thats there in every word is just amazing. Not a lot of people can put that much feeling in to short pieces. Wonderful work. Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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a good dark and twisting piece of poetry, your my addiction, perhaps having a closer look at that line?
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wow i really like this one
good job!
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wow i really like this.... just the way it is now...... good luck in your contest..... thanks for sharing this awith us at AP...!
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Thankyou!
Im so grateful for your comments, thankyou. I will return the favour when I can x x
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The title and the acrostic work on here going extremely well together. This one was very well done. Awesome job.
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Great Write. Deep, with lots emotion. =)
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a true story or prompt inspired??? love the write
your my addiction i now conclude, love that. very awesome! xxx -
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Hehe
Lets just say stan x
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a wonderful acrustic good luck in the contest
maralisa
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Okay, I just noticed the acrostic!
Lmao.
Title- 2/5
Creativity- 4/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 6/10
Overall package- 3/5
Total= 20/25 -
Prompt- 4/5
Creativity- 4/5
Use of metaphors, imagery, etc.- 7/10
Overall package- 3/5
Total= 19/25
Good luck.
I liked the imagery,
it was very captivating and detailed.
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