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echo

Missing image

 

 

 

 

fresh air pummelled
her lungs

and cravings drooled
for a filthy straw

 

 

 

eye lids closed
and sepia shoes
hit the floor


sighs
of exhale

echo

 

 

 

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  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 22

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    This is a great short write - I really like the raw imagery in this and the staccato images are great



    Polly


  • reywildrmr
    April 22

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    such a good poem

    continue to share a poem that gives pictures in our minds...

    all in all... great!

    i love the line...fresh air pummelled her lungs


  • landmark
    April 21

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    such vivid images... lovely. wonderful take on the picture.
    i love how you say so much in few words. the font and layout works really well too, nice complement to the words.