dear mutha fuckin jackass,
i no longer have a heart of glass
becuz you broke it long ago
probably the day you said hello
i just want you to know
when you were around i was aglow
i met you back in the 9th grade
we goofed off and had a charade
time together seemed like a decade
we were tight
nothing was outta sight
little did i know we were at a masquerade
and by you i was betrayed
i was your friend when you were hangin with that hoe
i stood my ground after every blow
i thought you were kind
thinkin back i was pretty blind
i always let you now what was on my mind
even though you didnt seem to care
through everything you did i was aware
that you i was without
like the time you cussed me out
never even apologized
looked like the beginning of a long list of goodbyes
soon enough the phone calls stopped
and our relationship was chopped
i kept my cool through the trial
but this whole time i was in denial
becuz i was so completely into you
there is nothing i could ever amount to
i can never be enough for you
what on god's green earth was i thinkin
my vision was blurred like i was drinkin
but look at me now i'm still sinkin
i know you wont help me no matter how much i beg and plea
you'll just got off your knee and quickly flee
you dont want anything to do with me
you cant stand to be involved
therefore this issue remains unresolved
you used to be the one i could confide
but now all these feelings inside
are beginning to collide
the one that i thrive
will be the one to bury me alive
loving you became a chore
we were battling it out in a war
you are the only one i adore
you i tried to ignore
you never hurt me before
but i cant do this anymore
i can feel something in the air
every time you give me that stare
that burns deep
and haunts me in my sleep
you are the reason i have cried
you are the one that made me attempt suicide
again
committing the ultimate sin
the sad thing is you didnt even know
cuz i never let it show
no matter what you did to me i could never hurt you
no matter what you did to me i would always love you
as i looked up at the digital moon
i prayed for this to be over soon
one way or another
we could never be with each other
i hoped to you i would become immune
i was wrong cuz you hit my heart with a harpoon
it must be your expert field
cuz it never healed
i used to believe
you would never decieve
its my fault i grieve
i wear my heart out on my sleeve
all that truth is pouring out
cuz i dont know which is the correct route
i feel you with every breath i take
deep down i know you are my heartache
and you're my only bittersweet sound
but kick it on the rebound
and see how it feels the other way around.
Author notes
this took me 2yrs to complete becuz this was my best friend n my first love. we never actually dated. probably a good thing cuz otherwise i'd be dead right now. it was a sensitive subject but now i'm numb cuz its happened 2 more times since but never went as bad. post script, he still doesnt know.
A contest entry
- Love beyond death by Minstrel-Morose.
700 points, ended April 27, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - HEARTACHE KILLS.... ;) by Toxic Meltdown.
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A little awkward but the ending turned it around. And long. But you were telling a story. The words---had no special pattern which worked in some cases and in other places, not so much. The flow was overall good. In all, nice write. And good luck in the contest.
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WOW
This is just wow like omfg full of emotion and feeling I have never rea anyhting like this its amazing I can't wait to read your othere ones
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wow this is fucking amazing!
you are Awesome at rhyming!!
my favorite lines were..
"i used to believe
you would never decieve
its my fault i grieve
i wear my heart out on my sleeve
all that truth is pouring out"
Great write -
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thank you
i started writing when i was 13 as a joke cuz i listen to a lot of music n rap sucks so much now so to begin with it was a joke i said anyone could rap n yeah....i put more effort into poetry doe. haha.
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This is a very nice piece but it is completly opposite what I'm looking for,
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Welcome to Allpoetry
I can feel the pain and anger in your words for everything that went wrong. Your comment about him being the reason you attempted suicide though, is unfair. We each make our own decisions.
Poetically, your piece has some great merit. But it would be more effective to a reader if you didn't have so much chat speak all through the piece.
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I hope that you enjoy the site, and if you have any questions please don't hesitate to ask
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Good job, keep writing.
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Welcome to AllPoetry
This is quite a lengthy poem however it is understandable with so much history behind the story and your pain; I think you've expressed this very well
I blinked a bit at the opening line but considering everything that's happened I can understand it - great poem
Best of Luck in the Contest
Keep Writing!
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