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A Shadows Dance

The words are simple
Coming from my mouth
Embrace the pity fall
Lo!- Glorious wrath

Nefarious beasts shall abominate
As the ashes from Heaven cease to create
Come ride the black, twisted train
To no where, everywhere, and the slain

I bow my head in prayer and shame
Come forth my shadows from the cave
I've found the easy twist and play
Of the shadows hazing maze

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  • Miss Faerie Greeters member
    April 19
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    Welcome to Allpoetry

    Your word choice is brilliant, you have a great grasp of vocabulary. What a dark piece, malicious intent and latent fear that waits, a beast in the shadows.

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    Good job, keep writing.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 19

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    Welcome to AllPoetry!

    This is a really good poem - I like the darkness that you have created here - it is a very interesting atmosphere my favourite part was the first stanza, it really set the poem up well I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at fixing "founf" to "found" in the last stanza - but that is just my opinion and I enjoyed this poem!

    Welcome to the site, I hope that you enjoy your time here at AllPoetry!


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