Blood mixed with tears
No more fears
I wish i could die
Every tear has been cried
I wish it was gone
Everything is wrong
Nothing is right
Blood will be shed tonight
A contest entry
- I Love You And Goodbye by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
400 points, ended April 22, 143 entries
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wow love it! very emotional .
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woo sad good
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i like this poem with the quick thoughts, but the last line really doesn't fit well, maybe you could re-word it a little like "Bleeding, tonight" just a seguestion, thanks for the comment on my poem. keep up the writing, ~Amy
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liked this one had a nice flow
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Ouch! dark and dreary poem, no question about it, forlorn, forsaken....a very nicely done poem. Short but neat and nifty stuff.. bravo!
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Very short, but you really made the point you were trying to make and thats all that matters. I liked how the words just seemed to fit with each other. Wonderful write and very well wrote. thanks for entering
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Welcome to Allpoetry
This piece is quite sad with a dark undertone.
In regards to cutting, speaking from experience - it is a pointless thing to do that will never get you anywhere. You just don't realise until you stop.
Poetically, your rhyme is a little mediocre and try a couple of full stops/commas
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nicely done..
very emotional piece.
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