All blood that was bled
all the tears that were shed
I thought you were there
But with no love to spare
With the thought i would die
You had no tears to cry
The cuts grow deeper
Not a tear to fall
Nobody cared
As the blade goes dull
Just wish I would die
The life i've led
Nothing left to cry
For all the pain and dread
I thought you were there
Guess i was wrong
The one person that was
Kept me alive and strong
Now you walk away
With one thing left to say
I loved you
But now you'll never know
Cause now i'm gone
But where to go
I'll always love you
I want you know
Past closed doors
No matter were we go
Your mine and i'm yours
A contest entry
- I Love You And Goodbye by RawrSmileBabyPlz.
400 points, ended April 22, 143 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - darkside by emoempess.
700 points, ended May 16, 201 entries
Honorable mention
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umm extremely sad, very emotional, i like it, and i can DEFINATELY relate.
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woo
i love it
thats so so me -
well this makes sense now, its probbly about me "now" isnt it...
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love it
great peom
i just wish i could die 2
life ...
sucks -
loved it the ending
I'll always love you
I want you know
Past closed doors
No matter were we go
Your mine and i'm yours
it realy reminded me of myself and what ive been through chocked me up a little -
hey i found your error, you spell "where" wrong
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hey babe nice poem
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love it
i really feel the pain...and it relates me!!i do cut...
"the power of darkness"group
"darkside"contest -
The beginning was ahmazing, well so was the very end. "With the thought i would die
You had no tears to cry
The cuts grow deeper
Not a tear to fall
Nobody cared
As the blade goes dull" I could picture everything in my head as i read this, ahmazing. Very well wrote. And i am kinda almost lost for words. Wonderful!Thanks for entering -
Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is a really good poem - I like how you have expressed yourself so well here, and the ending was beautiful
I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at adding some punctuation to help the flow a little and let the reader know when to pause and reflect on what you are saying - but that is just my opinion and I enjoyed this poem!
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Ah..despite the painful and heartfel truths there is a universl tone of the love ..and that is the beauty of this poetry..well done...
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