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14th April 2009 - Full Entry

 

 

 

 

 

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I never knew a heart could beat with completeness the way that it does, nor did I ever assume that it could shine finer than the day...and so, I've held her with simple honesty--kept her close to core, concerned myself only with her protection, whilst trepidation stretched toes to tap lightly along woes that whitened within ages of experience...and I skated across ponds and pads that became fads of expression, that etched themselves ever so slightly against softness of soul, allowing pain to drip from lips that learned only love...

 

and I climbed cares, aware only of others' needs, while I sacrificed self slice by minute slice--I became scanned images splashing plans along spines that belonged within embraces of palms unbeknown to taste; just chasms of circumstance that flew amongst skies too high for me to soar.

 

 

 

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I have known days and dreams, and I have reflected often upon years of loss...and I have paid the costs a thousand times and twenty

 

and still I am awed by the simple beauty of being; of seeing; of knowing...for I am worthy of love, of life, and more--

 

for passion plays beneath surfaces that erupt and spill, urging will to overcome those issues of personal worth, and denying corruption of its tempting caress while I cease to hide behind feigned weakness--I am no fool, no lesser force, no source to seek a profitable sigh; vulnerability has lost her flight and her wings refuse to sing...

 

and so I stand as self--as single entity, who loves because she can; who nurtures because she knows and who comforts with genuine compassion.

 

 

 

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Today, I walk without judgement and reside without recrimination, following fate along heart's unwritten ways, so I may know rays after tears and cruise across sighs of attainable achievements; to reach within speeches of sensuality and kiss bliss through the middles of whispered wants--harnessing hues of hope and happiness, that stand stoic between shoulders of survival and sight...

 

so I sway solo to spiritual airs, amid embers that refuse to fail.

 

 

 

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These fires fuel soul to succeed, to feed self off own inner knowledge and to know the privilege of understanding hands that hold her so safely--she is me and I am her and I am aware of the gifts so readily given...and I know too, that her weakness is her shining strength, whilst she spreads smiles in scents of pink and tempts true tales along her tongue

 

to become titles on tomorrow's coals.

 

 

 

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Author notes

credit;
"Bella's Lullaby - Edward Cullen Twilight - River Flows In You By Yiruma"
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=72HsHfhxiUg

when read aloud, it fits to the music

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  • ZachP gold member
    October 29

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    Oh my effin' god, Laura.
    I don't think you know
    how close to home this hit.
    And that you wrote it to the tune of one of my favorite songs
    has to be more than mere circumstance, I think...

    Wow.
    Wow.
    Wow.
    Wow.

    Your other work is amazing . . . but this is my favorite by a mile and a half. DAMN!

    lotsa love

  • Today, I walk without judgement and reside without recrimination

    what a beautiful state for one to walk in. thank you for referring me to this as i asked. it is a fantastic piece of prose and quite worthy of the gold trophy you have earned. viyanna rosemarie


  • libel -
    June 12
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    yes


  • heavenbird
    June 11
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    yes.

    please wait for the other judges comment.

  • This reminds me a lot of where I am at the moment, you captured this so perfectly, an introspective look at the woman inside. Nicely done. Best to you in the contest


  • LaMerci
    May 15
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    Wonderful...

    but then you're pro so I see why you won the gold.

  • dx d by me
    May 15

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    "Today, I walk without judgement and reside without recrimination," you have found a profound place to live....it is peaceful there, and deeply hopeful. If we could all find it...Beautiful writing. Geo

  • excellent write La, though I feel your first paragraph uses to many "ed" ending words...some of which dont seem grammatically correct.. I believe you were going for past tense, but think it would work better as present tense

    "and so, I've held her with simple honesty--kept her close to core, concerned myself only with her protection, whilst trepidation stretched toes to tap lightly along woes that whiten within ages of experience..and I skate across ponds and pads that became fads of expression, that etch themselves ever so slightly against softness of soul, allowing pain to drip from lips that learnt only love..."

    prob just a personal thing, but I think it reads much smoother that way...


  • Treasure 5 gold member
    May 15

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    Chasms of sercanstance I like this a really good write .Congratulations on the gold trophy and it was a pleasure.

  • Your prose speaks in a contented tongue as it orchestrates reasons with rhyme, divining worth from what is worth less, recognizing our own weaknesses are part and parcel of our strengths-and finding validation in perseverence is characteristic of endurance. Congratulations on the Golden Globe, a poetic Oscar, for this write that rolls the red carpet out for future portents with a joi de vivre of self-belief.

  • So deserving of that Gold trophy is this piece, I felt as though I was rigth there next to you sitting around a table right after reciting the Serenity prayer and reading the chosen chapter of the evening.

    One white chip for me please.

    I like it, I like it so!

  • Your prose is so personal,it reads as if the reader were sitting with you,a cup of coffee in hand and just listening. You find the essence of human strength,some never notice that ever in their life, I think you have lived it. It's tangible. Congratulations on a well deserved Gold Chez

    • Thanks Cheryl...it means as much to me that you read it as it does that you've also commented...i've missed you

  • This inspired me. I have been a lousy person lately; just weak, and making horrible decisions. I haven't been respecting myself and...the point is...regardless of whatever goes on in my life, it makes me want to change and do it better -- I was already starting to make that change as of yesterday, but this has inspired me to keep going even more, to keep trying --- and such reaction came from the last paragraph in particular. The strength displayed in this write is exceptional. Even with this reaction - like, with what I just said - set aside, you wrote this in an original way that held my attention. I definitely saved the best for last.

    • as individuals, for whatever we don't have...we always have ourselves. when strength is needed, always pull it from inside yourself - it's the only guarantee you've got that standing up is achieveable...and if standing hurts, sit as self and weep until determination knows your legs and feet & you will stand, you'll see take care of your heart, for it is precious indeed


  • Hetha gold member
    April 20

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    You offer some very rare insight and glimpses of beauty, pain and sorrow. You are one of few human beings, that when you write, I feel as though I'm sitting next to you. I missed you, Sis.
    Gorgeous writing.

    ~Hettie


  • Katilina
    April 20

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    I love the flow of thoughts and ideas. An exchange between the journal entry and the reader is profound. I feel like I am not alone in my belief in dreams and perceptions. Pen on...

  • oldpoets
    April 20

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    great writing. I kind of wish the write was within a more poetic form. This was good, very good. I could feel anger expressed. I could feel relife expressed. Excellnt imagery.

  • love this

  • Macsword
    April 20

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    Lines 23 thru 28...

    I believe are an outstanding piece of writing.

    The whole write kept my attention (and that's saying something).

    I liked this muchly.


  • perfectsunset gold member
    April 20

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    Wow this was breath-taking.
    Such beautiful imagery &
    deep emotion bursting
    from within. I love the twilight
    saga and bella's lullaby. You did
    an amazing job with this

  • This is a very interesting, heart-and-soul-felt write. I wasn't sure exactly what I was reading here, until about halfway through, although I sensed the poignant feelings flowing freely throughout. Thank you for sharing, and best wishes to you in all you do, always. Peace & hugs, xx Cyn xx


  • Howard Manser gold member
    April 19

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    Very Introspective and Honest!

    "I have known days and dreams, and I have reflected often upon years of loss...and I have paid the costs a thousand times and twenty" Where but to start at the beginning, to get to the end!


  • moaner
    April 19

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    not a poem, but flowed very well. very unique thoughts put into beautiful words. lovely write. well done with lots a praise to ya x


  • Emile
    April 19

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    Well done

    Wonderful words to dream by. You have taken a unique look at love and the human spirit and have woven a beautifully graceful poem that has a lesson built into the superb imagery. The poem flows in emotional waves that gently wash over the reader's heart and it feels good.

  • this requires no critique...


    beautiful.

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