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The thread

http://blueblack.deviantart.com/art/Good-vs-Evil-119483920

The tapestry of life,
flows long and never ending.
every actions a thread,
every mistake another twisted knot.

This battle of good vs evil
the fight, the battle for the tapestry,
is hanging by a thread.

Author notes

i like it, but i think i can imporove. what would you change? or not change?

A contest entry

how to imrove

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Comments


  • Kathraina silver member
    April 30

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    Marvelous take on the prompt!
    I love the simplicity here. Very true words!
    Bravo!


    ♥ Kate


  • hiddencreativity
    April 18
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    cool

    that was really good and sounded awesome