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Paranoid Peril



Paranoia; found a coin in the phonebooth;

surprised this time, no narcotics needle is pulsating

into precious body crevices

& that breathing is still a privilege


Depressive; life is shades of sarconomy

& the taste of tears costs too much for my delicate palet,

so I shall swallow death.

Author notes

21/150




Is it me you're missing
Whilst it's him you're kissing?

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  • division gold member
    May 25

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    Title: 10/10
    Content: 20/20
    Originality: 20/20
    Emotion: 10/10
    Imagery: 10/10
    Grammar: 10/10
    Prompt: 20/20
    Total: 100/100

    Comments:
    This completely blew me away. I absolutely loved the words before each stanza, and how much energy and emotion that was put into this! It was much more original than your typical "darker poem" and I like that you didn't go on and on about your pain of a lost heart.

    You wrote such a beautiful piece, that this deserves recognition, actually. I especially loved the last line: "so i shall swallow death". This really wrapped the poem together and really got straight to the point.

    Great job and good luck!


  • tears.of.silence
    May 8

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    #3

    Very nice. I love the the ending of this poem. Very interesting word choices as well. Great work. Thanks for entering and best of luck to you. Kahy


  • Candy Morphine
    April 19
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    I love the last line.
    you have such impact with such few sentences.