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Sunday Sermon

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Sunday dress lay crumpled
on the floor

     fresh -

her half naked
fifteen year old body smouldered

with untapped passions


swamped with images
of Hellfire and Satan
she felt her body stir


Priest or God
she was unsure

who has most power

but his words … touched deep

Father O’Brian’s face
formed behind closed eyes

Billy, Tom, her mind
flooded by faces,
mouths and eyes


she tingled and touched herself
mewed and sighed
unsure what to do,
   but …
enjoyed the sensation


she was called to lunch


   and

 

back to reality

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

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image is called Fresh-by Mick Payton.

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  • JinSays gold member
    April 26
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    I remember being this young, and having these feelings. I remember getting treated to images of boys I knew, behind my eyes. Very well done Sue. Not many would venture here, but you did so with class and sensitivity.
    Not to mention, it's just plain HOT.
    Love,
    jin


  • Edie gold member
    April 23

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    Seriously good write Sue...

    It makes one slightly uncomfortable for it touches reality in a slightly skewed way and for me that gives it strength and something to ponder…


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 26
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      Thank you for your great comment, I appreciate it very much. I hope that my free verse is going from strength to strength as I am basically a rhymer.

      Thanks again ... Sue


  • LadyElbereth
    April 22

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    Very Nice

    Amazing very erotic I was unsure at first where you were going although captivated I felt the pangs of innocence continued on though to find the resolution I had sought wonderfully written very subtle even though suggestive so masterfully penned I enjoyed reading you very much indeed my heartfelt thank you.

    Lady E


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 23
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      Many thanks for a lovely comment, I appreciate it and I'm so glad you enjoyed the read.

      Sue


  • Minstrel-Morose
    April 22
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    this was very interesting. Very very sexy and strange, in a good way. Im impressed, good job hun


  • Howard Manser gold member
    April 22
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    Aw!

    Sensual but tender, Adult with childlike innocence, Skip Lunch... It's fattening


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 23
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      Many thanks Howard, I appreciate your comment, as to skipping lunch ... sounds good to me

      Sue x


  • Edie gold member
    April 22
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    Oh this is very sensual...very sexy... and with that touch of real that most can connect with.
    Excellent!


  • arafura gold member
    April 18
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    Powerful and compelling. Truly erotic!


  • awannabepoet
    April 18

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    Youth in its lustfull prime

    Where does one begin when it is youth who leads, for in the end who could we love better than our very selves.

    "her half naked
    fifteen year old body smouldered
    with untapped passions"

    This is love in its truest form as when it is born. If lust was to be the defining moment for a lifetime of happinness we would surely all be lost.

    I like it, I like it so!


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 19
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      Thank you for your comment, I wanted to get across her innocence in this piece, I hope that is what I managed to do.

      Sue x


      • awannabepoet
        April 19
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        Yes of course and in a very lighthearted way as well, I simply felt that in life there is no strong love or loathing than the one we have for ourselves that would include those special moments alone as well.


  • Kendal Palmer gold member
    April 18

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    well alrighty then! you have described the most perfect sunday afternoon! call me to lunch anytime!!
    great picture BTW. thanks for sharing. keep up the great work. peace to you always in all ways...
    -Kendal


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 19
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      Most Sundays are an open house and lunch is always included

      Thanks for your comment, I appreciate it.

      Sue x


  • valjohnjennings
    April 18
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    good poem

    What we think is who we are. We all have diversions. It's good to have reality checks.


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 19
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      Thank you so much for your comment I appreciate it. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem.

      Sue x


  • csmmoms2
    April 18

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    A lovely Sunday afternoon encounter. A poets specialty.
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/4663281


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    April 18

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    "Billy, Tom, her mind
    flooded by faces,
    mouths and eyes"

    I find it hard to believe that there wasn't a Jim floating around in those loose dreams. Definitely in need of a rewrite here

    jk, of course!


    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 18
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      Many thanks Jim, there may well have been a Jim and I could do a rewrite, but I think I'll let it stand

      Sue x


  • cricketjeff gold member
    April 18

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    Such a refreshing take on the prompt, we clearly saw different bottoms in the picture!

    This is a delightfully sensual poem, that entices and surprises throughout, great stuff

    Jeff

    • Sue Cardwell gold member
      April 18
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      Thank you, you know we never see the same bottoms

      Sue x


    • Exit-Stage-Right
      April 18
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      Remember, Jin said go beyond the obvious... that's a lot easier for women to do than either you or me or guys like Mairi!


  • Patpowers silver member
    April 18
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    Nice job again here! Pretty impressive in my opinion!! THANKS!


  • Daizee silver member
    April 18

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    I like how you've blended the innocent with the sultry...

    Love,
    Stacy


  • individuality gold member
    April 18

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    a good poem, at first i thought it was about rape but as it unfolded she was daydreaming of an encounter.

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