The moment he broke your heart, you were knocking on my door,
pouring out your soul and telling me how he didn't love you anymore.
You cried and cried until your tears were all dry,
and then I told you i wished he'd just die.
The next day we walked sided by side,
and told our best friend how he'd lied.
Now we walk down the hallway, ready to pounce,
like three slick felines chasing a mouse.
I knee him where it hurts and you kick him in the calve.
He's on the ground and I can't help but laugh.
He whimpers in agonizing pain,
and his face clouds over with shame.
Everyone stops, whispers, and stares,
but no one notices the smile we share.
We giggle and snicker as we walk away,
and no one can ruin our perfect day.
Author notes
my friend got her heart broken, I guess you could say there are some hard feelings between me and the guy.
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haha. Feel bad for the guy. You all seem like good friends. and you kick him in the calve like tht line. Good discriabtion ( i thnk i spelled tht wrong
) good job and good luc
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interesting
sticking with friends is a good thing
good luck with the contest -
Welcome to AllPoetry!
This is a really good poem - I like the idea of getting revenge on someone, and I like that you stuck by your friend, like skylar mentioned
I think from a constructive criticism point you might like to look at "ho" I think you meant to be "how" - but that is just my opinion and I enjoyed this poem!
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wow this is really good,
and im glad you stuck by your friend
great job keep writtin
bravo
x-skylar-x
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